User talk:Jelopple

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Here are some grammar points/ syntax you should fix:

I think titling the Early Life section as "Early life enslaved" is a bit redundant.

Add a comma: ".....his parents, Hambleton Robert Jea and Margeret Jea,...."

Change this: "During Jea's teenage years, when he had acquired a new passion for Christianity...."

For the freedom section: "After passing through a series of slave owners, Jea had convinced himself that the last one...."

"Alongside the fear of Jea teaching other enslaved people about Christianity, came the fear/threat...."

"That splintered from the more hierarchical (Christianity? Orthodox Christianity?)" Be more specific and no need for "parent."

For the line starting "He the worked as a cook..." write "East Indies" and "West Indies" next to each other; or abbreviate it to "West and East Indies."

In the same paragraph: "Although he worked to gain money, he also used his travels as opportunity to preach gospel."

I don't think you need this line: On one of his voyages, he took notice of the lightning strike's target on crew member who recently made blasphemous comments on Psalm 107.^[1] He attributed their harm as punishment for disobedience to God.

The line proceeding that one can be more concise: "In 1811, Jea's travels were halted when his ship was captured by French forces. Jea found an opportunity to escape by joining the American consul...." Remove the quotes around the word "pacifist." (Unless you have evidence that contradicts his pacifist nature and you hope to include it.)

"Jea spent four years being moved" change it to "Jea moved/traveled around northern France for four years..."

"During his stay, Jea published his autobiography and hymnbook during the 1810s. Jea 'married his fourth wife Jemima Davis..." I think you accidentally repeated the first half of the sentence twice.

Include the line "Jea later married Charity...." before you mention his death.

"Henry Louis Gates Jr. theorized the "talking book" trope. This is the trope where the formerly enslaved person would be able..." Try to change this into a single sentence.

I think one useful addition could be a list of his published works.

I really like how your edits are very subtle but profound at the same time. You manage to reword and rephrase information in a way that adds important context without being excessively wordy. Most of your mistakes are simple grammatical and syntaxical errors that effect the overall flow of the article. You also switch tenses several time throughout the text. Please review your article and ensure that you discuss his life in past tense. I think you did a great job and your use of sources was great!

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:20, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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feedbackMr.Ek0 (talk) 19:08, 29 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

A kitten for you!

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Mr.Ek0 (talk) 19:08, 29 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

Lead - Although the lead is short, I think it introduces the topic well. It is concise and includes the contents that will be discussed within the article.

Content- The content added is thorough and relevant to the topic. It is up-to-date and adds important information that gives better insight into who John Jea was.

Tone and Balance - The content is added in a neutral tone and there is no heavy bias. Although the information is from a couple of sources, no viewpoint seems to be over or under represented.

Sources and References - The sources are reliable, since a lot of the information comes from the subject himself. The sources are also properly formatted and I can find them when I look it up myself. The information added is relevant and trustworthy.

Organization - The article is very well organized and easy to read. The information flows well and nothing seems out of place. There are no grammatical or spelling errors.

Images and Media - There is an image of the subject that adheres to Wikipedia guidelines.

Overall impressions -

I think the edits made to this article are excellent. The content is very thorough and is relevant to the topic. The edits made are clear and concise, making the article easy to read and understand. The organization is well done and also adds to the readability of the article. Overall, the contributions you've made have made the Wikipedia world a better place! Bakedbread00 (talk) 21:13, 29 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]