User talk:Kellogg.jor
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Hello, Kellogg.jor, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 05:05, 6 July 2016 (UTC)
Feedback[edit]
Hi. Sorry I took so long getting back to you - I was out of town last week, and I missed your message.
Your draft wasn't ready for mainspace, so I moved it back to your sandbox. I will give you more detailed feedback shortly. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:08, 1 August 2016 (UTC)
So I took a careful look at your article and made a few formatting fixes. References should be placed after punctuation, not before, and there shouldn't be a space before the ref. You should also avoid using "bare URLs" - URLs are subject to link rot, and if no additional information is provided, a simple rearrangement in a website can make a source useless. If you include a full reference, to reference can usually be located, even if the URL has changed. Please reviist the citation training for a refresher on how to do this easily using the Cite tool. (I fixed several in the first section.)
You have a numbered list of references at the end of the page, but there's no clear way to connect them to the article text. Please using inline references (and the cite tool) to directly connect them wit the statements that they support. You also used Wikipedia articles among your references; Wikipedia, because it is user generated, should not be used as a source. You should link to articles, but as ways for readers to learn more about topics, not as sources.
Finally, there's the question of where this should reside. The material you write is certainly suitable for Wikipedia, but I don't believe that "Music as a Core Subject" is really a good topic for a stand-alone article. For one thing, you haven't written about the subject narrowly - in the context of the US. "Music as a core subject in the United States" seems like an awfully specific topic. I think the topic you're really writing about here is music education, or to be more specific, music education in the United States. I think you should merge your content into that article; although it's rather long, that's probably the best home for this material.
If you have further questions about any of this, please get in touch. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:35, 1 August 2016 (UTC)
- Looks good! Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:32, 9 August 2016 (UTC)