User talk:Kerenefernandez/sandbox

Review by Autumn Hampton

Overall you edits seem neutral and your sources seem reliable. I only have a few corrections to recommend. The first has to do with grammar. Make sure all locations are capitalized, such as China and Tibet. Under the section titled 'Robes in Different Sects" you can delete the word 'most' before oldest since 'old' has the suffix '-est'. Also the sentence this correction is in seems to be longer then necessary. Try breaking it into two sentences so it is easier to comprehend while reading. According to our tutorials we should be adding citations to sentence that have controversial claims, so the comment you made regarding China wanting to have robes with sleeves covering both arms may need a citation since at the time it was controversial. Lastly, if your source gives you the name of the sects that call the ringing of the bell "Mystic Law" attribute that phrase to them. Aut hampton (talk) 00:36, 18 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Review by Jessica Nguyen

Overall, your article discusses a lot about visual topics, it would be better to add some pictures to your article to have a better insight of the symbolism of Buddhism. You have a clear structure and explanations of the practices of Buddhism and it was easy for me to understand. There are some grammar changes that need to be made. Such as in the topic of Prayer Position of Symbolism, you added "another form of symbolism of Buddhism is the form of joining hands...", you can OMIT 'the form'. Make sure you go back to each heading and re-read the sentences. There are some words which need to be OMIT and some commas that need to be added/deleted. For example, in the ritual bell symbolism, "in all sects of Buddhism" there needs to be a comma after Buddhism to continue the sentence. So make sure you go back and catch these mistakes. Overall Jessicahnguyen 29 (talk) 17:46, 19 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]