User talk:Klcopus

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your sandbox

Hi Klcopus, I just had a peek at your sandbox, and I saw that the sources you stated were not precise enough. For instance, if you write "Horney" as a source, you also need to write in which of her books you found the text, including page number(s). With friendly regards, Lova Falk talk 18:33, 23 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi User:Lova Falk Thanks for the input! I added them! Klcopus (talk) 13:47, 14 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Talkback

Hello, Klcopus. You have new messages at Talk:Basic anxiety.
Message added 15:48, 26 February 2013 (UTC). You can remove this notice at any time by removing the {{Talkback}} or {{Tb}} template.

Lova Falk talk 15:48, 26 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Your edits in User:Klcopus/sandbox

Wow! Quite an improvement! A few remarks though:

It would be really good if you in the very first sentence of the article could give a definition of basic anxiety.
Wikipedia articles don't finish with a conclusion, the WP:lead of the article should be the summary /conclusion of the whole article
You write well, but your style is at some places a bit too "vivid". An encyclopedia is quite "dry". So instead of "On September 1885, there was born in Eilbeck, Germany, a girl who had a very interesting and academic future ahead of her." you should write something like: "Karen Horney was born on September 1885, in Eilbeck, Germany."
Copying stuff that others have written is a no-no! I found the sentence above on Helium's website! Copying sentences like that constitute copyright violation.

(Wikipedia software prevents me from writing down the address of Helium, but anybody googling "On September 1885, there was born in Eilbeck, Germany, a girl who had a very interesting and academic future ahead of her," will find the site.)

You need to improve the references considerably! "Horney" is not enough. Which book, which page?

With friendly regards, Lova Falk talk 20:17, 13 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

PS Here are other sentences that you copied:

"Movement toward people implies accepting one's feelings of helplessness and acting to win the affection of others, the only way the person can feel secure with other people." This sentence can be found word for word here.
"Just like there are negative impulses like those mentioned above, there are normal impulses that every human has encountered, for instance, there are positive responses for basic anxiety." This one is from the above-mentioned website Helium again.
The 10 neurotic needs were copied from this website
How much more did you copy? Lova Falk talk 20:36, 13 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Another PS: I moved these comments from Talk:Basic anxiety to your own talk page, so you will be less exposed, and you can archive these comments once your wikipedia project is over. Lova Falk talk 21:12, 13 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi User:Lova Falk, as you know I am still in the process of working on the article and still have a lot of changes to make. I have been working on it recently and fixed majority of the changes you mentioned. Thank you for your input.

Your sources of Basic anxiety

Please improve the sources of Basic anxiety. Source information "Horney" is as incomplete as it can be. Name of book, year and page number are needed - or an account of the sources that you actually used. Thank you. Lova Falk talk 16:25, 8 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
PS It is really a pity that you did not give complete sources, because you greatly improved the article, but not stating the sources that you really used casts a shadow over your good work. Lova Falk talk 17:06, 8 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]