User talk:Lanafan25
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:30, 16 January 2024 (UTC)
User:BrilliantMonkeyBrilliantMonkey (talk) 04:38, 9 March 2024 (UTC)
Peer Review:
A. Neutral Voice 1. "The current renewable sources of energy like Hydropower, Wind, Solar, and Geothermal energy have limitations in maximizing energy for human life due to geographical reasons or technological reasons.", "Hydrogen is the most abundant element in the universe and the heat relealsed per unit mass is three times more than that of gasoline" Strong neutral voice in both.
2. " Hydrogen can be easily produced by domestic sources, reducing our relience to getting energy overseas." As an editor I don't believe we use personal phrases like "our", as you don't have to be American to use Wikipedia.
B. Close Paraphrasing and Plagiarism
"Hydrogen needs tremendous efforts with respect to its commercial viability to be used as a primary energy source." This sentence is far too close to the source's wording. I would suggest rephrasing the sentence and adding some interpretation to connect back to your limitation.
C. Readability
1. "Depending on the production process of hydrogen it can be classified as gray hydrogen if it is made from fossil fuels such as coal and oil and makes full scale greenhouse gas emission." I found this sentence had a great start!
2. "Blue hydrogen is produced from natural gas, biogas, syngas and makes carbon emission but it is captured and reused." I had trouble reading the end of this sentence, the section on "makes carbon emission but it.." I think could be reworded to be more clear.
3. "Hydrogen is pretty light and everywhere on earth and is emission free when used as fuel." Maybe a little nitpick on my end but I think changing out the adjective "pretty" would be best as it stands out compared to the professional language of the article.
D. Rubric
Lead Section: I think your lead is very strong! I was able to know immediately what this portion of the article will be about and got a good summary of points.
Article: The organization was solid and it felt natural going from one topic to the next. There is a lack of balance in the writing, however, as some language has a bias towards hydrogen energy being good and the author being American.
References: There is only four listed, but there is at least one citation per paragraph which is good. Sources themselves appear to be credible as well.
Completeness: I do not know if this is entirely required but having four sources instead of six may present an issue.
Existing Article: The new section certainly fills in a key gap and works to add to the Wikipedia page well.
E. Final Questions/Considerations
1. I believe you have a great system of listing out the different types of hydrogen and what defines each.
2. The key is some close paraphrasing problems and biased language present. If the sources are cited in a less direct way and the biased language of signaling authorship or that hydrogen power is positive that solves those issues.
3. I think it was a good choice to have a limitations section as well!