User talk:Mavinstar

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Hello, Mavinstar, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:41, 16 January 2019 (UTC)

Article evaluation

I plan on adding more information about the Iroquois men's national lacrosse team. Right now, the page lacks information concerning the cultural and traditional impact attached to the game of lacrosse.

Here are a few sources:

Camara, L. (n.d.). A History of Iroquois Nationals Lacrosse. Iroquois Nationals. Retrieved from https://iroquoisnationals.org/the-iroquois/a-history-of-iroquois-nationals-lacrosse/ Deer, J. (2018, July 12). Iroquois Nationals arrive in Israel for World Lacrosse Championships after passport issues resolved. CBC. Retrieved from https://www.cbc.ca/news/indigenous/iroquois-nationals-arrive-israel-lacrosse-world-championships-1.4743850 Downey, A. (2012). Engendering Nationality: Haudenosaunee Tradition, Sport, and the Lines of Gender1. Journal of the Canadian Historical Association, 23(1), 319-354. Federation of International Lacrosse (n.d.). Retrieved from https://filacrosse.com/mens-lacrosse/#history-men Fryling, K. (2006, July 27). Nike deal promotes Native American wellness, lacrosse. University of Buffalo Reporter. Retrieved from http://www.buffalo.edu/ubreporter/archive/vol37/vol37n43/articles/BrayLyonsLacrosse.html Gross, S. (2010, July 14). UK won't let Iroquois lacrosse team go to tourney. The San Diego Union-Tribune. Retrieve from https://www.sandiegouniontribune.com/sdut-uk-wont-let-iroquois-lacrosse-team-go-to-tourney-2010jul14-story.html Keller, A. (2015, September 29). The Iroquois Nationals Lacrosse Story. Florida Lacrosse News. Retrieved from https://www.floridalacrossenews.com/the-iroquois-nationals-lacrosse-story/ Nike (2006, May 4). Historic Partnership Begins with Iroquois Nationals Lacrosse. Retrieved from https://news.nike.com/news/historic-partnership-begins-with-iroquois-nationals-lacrosse Price, S. L. (2010, July 19) Pride of a Nation. Sports Illustrated. Retrieved from https://www.si.com/vault/2010/07/19/105961100/pride-of-a-nation

Evaluating sources.

Some of the links provided in the references either don't work or lead to site where information isn't provided. Not a lot of information available to the Talk Page.

Mavinstar (talk) 16:41, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

Notes

Hi! I have some notes for you.

• This is written in a fairly casual, essay-like tone. It needs to be written in the formal tone that Wikipedia uses - for this I recommend reviewing some of the other articles on Wikipedia to get a good idea of this style.

• This has some subjective, original research-esque tones as well. Things like "it is important" are subjective, as the importance of something is relative to the reader. Some may see a point as important while another may say that another point is more important to highlight. If you're drawing from the source, it's a good idea to attribute claims of this nature, like "according to...".

• The sourcing needs to be in-line per Wikipedia's citation style guidelines.

I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:23, 5 March 2019 (UTC)