User talk:Msrad1996
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[edit]Hello, Msrad1996, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:03, 22 May 2016 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) Thanks for your edits. 1. The Feminist Pathway perspective will be the actual title of the post. It's a perspective in criminology which I clarified in the first sentence. That second clause was just meant to be like a subtitle to clarify, but I will not actually entitle my page with it. 2. I'll try not to awkwardly interchange women and female 3. This is meant to stand alone for now. if there were a feminist criminology page, it may be a good add on.
Msrad1996 (talk) 19:37, 31 May 2016 (UTC)Msrad1996
- What other main strains of thought are there in feminist criminology? How dominant is this strain within the overall feminist perspective/critique?
- If it is means to be a standalone, you need to include a lede section, which is a bit like an introduction but there are some specific differences from a typical introduction to a narrative or topic essay. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:05, 31 May 2016 (UTC)
Feedback
[edit]Hi, MSrad1996. I took a look at your draft. Here are some comments:
- I think that paragraph says exactly what it should say. I broke it out from the latter half and cited the source for the paragraph as a whole. Are there other sources which talk about this lack of coverage?
- I edited the first paragraph a bit. I tried to keep the thoughts in the same order and removed some detail. Take a look.
- Is the section title meant to be italicized? it's "Feminist Pathways Perspective: How Victimization Leads Women to Crime", which leads me to believe it is a book title.
- What is the feminist pathways perspective? The article refers to what it has to say about particular elements of victimization so a reader can gather a bit from opposition and context, but it's not clear at the start of each paragraph.
- You've mixed use of "females" and "women" throughout. You don't need to be completely consistent, sometimes female is the term you're looking for and other times it's awkward to use 'women' in that place, but try not to use them interchangeably.
- Is this meant to be a new article or an add-on to an existing article?
Sorry for bombarding you with questions. If you answer them I'll be able to help you more ably with your draft. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:23, 31 May 2016 (UTC)