User talk:Rls13
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Peer Review
[edit]I think the Geoffrey Keynes article was a great choice to improve! Since he was renowned in several fields, I'm interested to see how much of the article you invest into his medical experience and his authorship. Just to start basic improvements on your article, I would make the lead a little more detailed to describe his legacy. I see that his medical career section was entirely written by you. I would recommend that you make his medical career a broad topic and then organize his achievements and timeline into subcategories. I think you did a great job on improving the organization so far, and I think the use of subtopics would help your organization a great deal, especially since he wasn't just a scholar of one field. I also think the order of your organization could use some work. Generally, family and early life information comes first and then legacy comes last. Since you are improving a biographical article, it would be helpful to write it in a chronological layout. I also think you should cite your sources more frequently, but I'm sure you'll have a better grasp on that once you write more information and content into this article. Great job so far!
Response to Peer Review
[edit]Thank you so much for your thoughtful and articulate peer review. I agree about adding to the lead, and will get on that right now. I think the article is already in chronological order with family and early life information first and then legacy last, so I'm not sure if I need to make any changes to that. Totally agree about citation, Professor Bazell pointed that out as well. It's going to be tough to find a ton of new sources, but I think I'll be able to get it done. Thanks again! --Rls13 (talk) 23:14, 1 April 2018 (UTC)
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Intertwine Session
[edit]Hi! I was on your Intertwine session earlier today, and wanted to thank you for taking the lead on the sections and consolidating the info. Also for dealing with my technical difficulties in the library! Hope your classes are going well. Lauramt1023 (talk) 20:11, 17 February 2018 (UTC)
Hey bud finally figured out how to message you. -William — Preceding unsigned comment added by William Babin (talk • contribs) 21:11, 17 February 2018 (UTC)
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Your "article evaluation" section is very well done. Have you checked off that entire list? RJBazell (talk) 15:56, 13 April 2018 (UTC)
Thank you Professor Bazell. I've checked off most of the problems that I discussed in my article evaluation, but not quite all of them. I plan to finish doing that, and then adding a bunch of new material, this weekend. Rls13 (talk) 19:25, 13 April 2018 (UTC)
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[edit]Looks good. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:28, 17 April 2018 (UTC)