User talk:Simonebedjean
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[edit]Please complete the assigned training modules. --TrudiJ (talk) 11:25, 30 January 2019 (UTC)
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:35, 6 February 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Hi! I just finished your peer review in your sandbox talk page.
--Erint333 (talk) 02:09, 26 February 2019 (UTC)
peer review response AJ Tavantzis
[edit]Simone's review of your article "Pete Mavarich" Hi A.J, just wanted to start off by saying your contribution to your article is very well done, from how much work you put in to the simple things like the different sections and font stuff. The "Early life" section of your article I enjoyed the most, because it is very factual, nothing more nothing less. It got straight to the point with just the fact, on the other hand the section before "early life" had some statements in their that could arguably be seen as biased. Like for example the last two sentences of that section. If you make the rest of your article more like the "early life" section and less like a story telling type of narrative, it will be perfect!
Overall with all said, I still have a lot to take away from this article to better help me write mines. I like the mixture of sources that you included some scholarly ones and some already wikipedia articles that gives more information on who are what you're referring too in the sentence you're citing. You're sectioning of paragraphs also makes the information you give more balanced as well , great jobSimonebedjean (talk) 00:11, 25 February 2019 (UTC)
Hi Simone,
I want to thank you for your review of my chosen article. I was happy you reviewed it early so I could learn from what you said to be able to work on my peer review to be honest. Your early response has really helped me. I agree the early life section is factual and has great information to understand who Pete Maravich is and where he came from. He is a legend and I have read so much about him and watched countless videos of old highlights. I was a young kid dribbling a basketball out of the car just like him because I read he did that to practice. Yes your point you made about making more of the article like the early section would be good. I thank you for your input. Understanding what is original work and cited work will be my challenge but i will work on this to do my best. I think formatting this article correctly will help with the ease of reading it. I will definitely work on that as well. have been doing alo tof correcting and writing in microsoft word so I can see it how I know best to then transfer it over a couple sentences at a time with the citations. Yes I see their are alot of references and I plan on using them and some additional oones to edit some of the work already in the article. This has been tricky but Im am getting their and I am sure you will also. What did you think of the editing process?. Iappreciate your input.
alist of edits I will be making from your suggestions are
1 make sure less storytelling and more factual with citations.
2. Use sections and paragraphs to make it easier to read.
3. Make other sections like the early life section and it will improve article.
4 Edit section by section and start to bring over to Wikipedia.
5. I will review and edit sources for notability and make sure they are credible.
Thank you for your time. A J TavantzisAJ Tavantzis (talk) 02:12, 6 March 2019 (UTC)
NY Legislature edit?
[edit]Hiya Simone,
I took out the lead sentence from the Government_of_New_York_(state)#Legislature section which you added here. I'm not on Wikipedia that often any longer, but if you'd like to talk about it go ahead and hit me up. I'll check back over the next few days, at least. Ohms law (talk) 21:23, 10 November 2020 (UTC)