User talk:Warriorzee
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[edit]Hello, Warriorzee, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:45, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]I found this wiki page really interesting to read! The director you chose is an incredible woman.
My suggestions for ways to improve are:
First, to get a bit more specific in your explanations of things. An example of this is in the "early life" section of the page, it talks about how politics came into Masri's life but not why that was important to her life or her work and it left me wondering why it was included there.
The next thing is that I think it would be beneficial to split the "Personal Life and Career" section into two different parts. I know that she and her husband were partners in life and in film, but it would make the sections easier for a reader to understand sort of the different aspects of their life and relationship. If you can find the date when they got married and add that information into the section, that would help too. If you did not want to split this section in two, I think it would beneficial to put the information in chronological order because it would help it to flow more clearly for readers and be more easily understood. I found it a little bit confusing the way that it is written right now.
Otherwise, I think you did a really good job of integrating your writing style with the writing style of the previous editors and that it holds a lot of good information on your director.