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The article was archived by Hog Farm via FACBot (talk) 22 June 2022 [1].

Beverly White[edit]

Nominator(s): Jon698 (talk) 05:28, 25 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about Beverly White, who was the longest serving woman in the Utah State Legislature. During her career she would sometimes be the only woman to chair a committee, held multiple leadership positions within the Democratic caucus, and was awarded as legislator of the year multiple times by multiple groups. She was also incredibly active in the Utah Democratic Party and the national party. Jon698 (talk) 05:28, 25 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • Image review—pass (t · c) buidhe 11:55, 25 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Kavyansh[edit]

  • "White also held multiple positions in the local, state, and national Democratic Party" — Suggesting "White held multiple positions in the Democratic Party at the local, state, and national levels"
  • "She was educated at Tooele High School and married Floyd White" — Does Floyd White has to do anything with the school? If not, suggesting "She was educated at Tooele High School and in 19XX, she married Floyd White"
  • "from 1964 to 2004, with the exception of 1976" — suggesting to link the DNCs
  • Link Satellite campus in the lead
  • "During the 1976 election" — Specify house of rep.
  • "She also helped establish" — specify her last name at the beginning of every new paragraph.
  • "White wrote Women Legislators of Utah, 1896–1993 which was a book" — "White wrote Women Legislators of Utah, 1896–1993, a book"
  • "from 1896 to 1993" — not required, already mentioned in the book's title.
  • ", and the university later" — suggesting "; the university later"
  • "an honorary doctorate's degree" — Shouldn't "doctorate's" be "doctorate"?
  • The "Capital punishment" section needs to be re-written; case titles are italicized, and what does those two decisions have to do with White's positions?

That is on the first read. More to come after these have been resolved. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:08, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • @Kavyansh.Singh: Thank you. I did everything that you asked except for the last part. The reason I mention the Supreme Court cases is to give the context that she wanted to overturn a SCOTUS ruling rather than change existing state law. Jon698 (talk) 13:07, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Continuing:

  • Do we need to mention her mother's death in the lead?
  • "In 1947, she married Floyd White, with whom she had five children, at the Salt Lake Temple" — Why is specifying 'Salt Lake Temple' important?
  • Anything we know about her career from 1947 to 1959?
  • "White supported the restoration of capital punishment in Utah and Utah became" — repetition
  • "Utah is one of twelve states to have not ratified the Equal Rights Amendment as of 2021" — 'as of 2021' should be in the beginning
  • I think 'Write-in' should not be in the party column, Independent might work.
  • How are, in some of the elections, both the candidates incumbent? I assume they are incumbent from different districts?
  • Do we have no scholar sources discussing her?
  • Ref#25: ' United States House of Representatives' should be in the |publisher field
  • Ref#42: link the newspaper; same with Ref#54 and few others
  • Ref#79 is not via Newspapers.com; is it? And isn't https://www.equalrightsamendment.org/ a primary source?
  • Specify that the Merrill Nelson portrait is from 2021
  • Suggesting to add ALT text
  • "as a part of Utah's twenty-six member delegation to the Democratic National Convention" — pipe 'the' inside the link to avoid MOS:EGG issues. Same with various other instances.
  • Check the last para of Later life, for italicization
  • Can we get her signature converted to svg file, background removed? Just a suggestion.

That is it. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:47, 9 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • @Kavyansh.Singh: I did most of what you asked. The reason I included Salt Lake Temple is because it is the largest Mormon temple so it seems important enough to mention. It is standard for both candidates to be listed as incumbents if they are redrawn into the same district with 2012 United States House of Representatives elections in Ohio being an example between Marcy Kaptur and Dennis Kucinich in the 9th district. Also they are are listed as incumbents even if they lose the primary with Joe Crowley in 2018 United States House of Representatives elections in New York as an example. I fixed the linking issue for the newspapers with the remaining unlinked ones having no Wikipedia page. Sadly there are no scholarly sources for White as I found nothing on Google scholar or the Internet Archive. I will convert her signature to a SVG momentarily. Jon698 (talk) 20:27, 9 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Also for the information between 1947 to 1959, there were no major mentions of her and I assume it was mainly due to her being a housewife in the shadow of her husband and father-in-law's political careers. Also what do you mean by "pipe 'the' inside the link". Jon698 (talk) 20:29, 9 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Coordinator comment - as this nomination has been open for more than three weeks and has attracted only one general support, it is liable to be archived within the next couple days unless significant movement towards a consensus to promote occurs. Hog Farm Talk 03:57, 19 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Archiving per above, the usual waiting period for renomination will be waived here because of the lack of reviews. Hog Farm Talk 23:04, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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