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- Nominator(s): Tone 06:35, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
Pharaohs! Pyramids! And ... ancient whales, wow! Egypt has 7 WHS and a series of tentative sites. Standard style. The nomination for Argentina is already seeing support so I am adding a second nomination. Tone 06:35, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
Comments from Alavense
[edit]- "The latter is also the only natural site in Egypt, the other sites are listed for their cultural properties" --> "The latter is also the only natural site in Egypt, the other sites being listed for their cultural properties"
- Is the capitalisation really needed in "Ruins of town of Elephantine" and "Stone quarries and Unfinished obelisk"?
- "around the tomb of Menas of Alexandria who died in 296" - A comma is missing.
- No need for the capital c in "Classical antiquity".
- "Mount Horeb - the place where" - Use {{endash}}.
- "the latter has been listed as a World Heritage Site in 2002" - That one should also by preceded by an {{endash}}.
- "It was first used by Sneferu of the Fourth Dynasty who constructed the Bent Pyramid" - A comma mising before "who".
- "and statues.|"
- In "The monasteries of the Arab Desert and Wadi Natrun", the description reads a bit convoluted. Maybe something along the lines of "Other monasteries include those of Saint Paul the Anchorite, Saint Pishoy" and so on?
- Shouldn't it be "a 30-inch reflecting telescope"?
- The references are used not only for the description, but also for the other columns, so I think it would make more sense to have them isolated in another column to the right of the description.
That's all I saw. Thanks for your dedication to the list, Tone. Kind regards. Alavense (talk) 07:19, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- Fixed, thanks! As for references, the table is already rather busy, so additional column would make it worse, stylistically. I think it is rather clear for the reader what they refer to. The capitalizations are per source. The rest I've fixed. Tone 07:56, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you very much. Support. Alavense (talk) 08:27, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
- MPGuy2824
- "The monuments are: Abu Simbel (commissioned by Ramesses II, relocation pictured), New Amada, New Wadi Sebua, New Kalabsha, the Philae temple complex (on Agilkia Island, from Greco-Roman period), Qubbet el-Hawa (Old and Middle Kingdom Tombs), Ruins of the town of Elephantine, Stone quarries and Unfinished obelisk, the Monastery of St. Simeon, and the Fatimid Cemetery."
- "It was a major city during the Islamic Golden Age and beyond," It isn't clear if beyond means before the golden age OR after OR both.
- "The main buildings were constructed in".
- "stability of the clay-based soils," Also end this sentence with a full stop.
- "oldest Christian monastery still in function" to "oldest functioning Christian monastery"
- wikilink "oracle temple"
- "comprises the Temple of Serabit Khadem"
- "military expeditions in both ways" to "military expeditions in both directions"
- "Feiran Oasis has" to "The Feiran oasis"
- "to the dorcas gazelle" in two places
- wikilink "humid periods".
- plularize "dugong".
- There seems to be a lot of overlap between "Southern and Smaller Oases, the Western Desert" and "Kharga Oasis and the Small Southern Oases", An explanatory note would be good here.
- That's all I got. Please ping me when you fix these. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 10:35, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
- Done, thanks! Great comments. Tone 14:02, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
Comments
[edit]- "First sites in Egypt were listed in 1979" => "The first sites in Egypt were listed in 1979"
- "The latter is also the only natural site in Egypt" => "The latter is the only natural site in Egypt"
- "resulting in threats to structural integrity of the monuments" => "resulting in threats to the structural integrity of the monuments"
- "Main monuments date from the period from 1500 to 1000 BCE" => "The main monuments date from the period from 1500 to 1000 BCE"
- "Ruins of the town of Elephantine," => "the ruins of the town of Elephantine,"
- "Stone quarries and Unfinished obelisk," => "stone quarries and an unfinished obelisk,"
- "The latter has been listed as a World Heritage Site in 2002" => "The latter was listed as a World Heritage Site in 2002"
- "on a mountain at the height of 2,150 m (7,050 ft)" => "on a mountain at a height of 2,150 m (7,050 ft)"
- "The complex contained two basilicas, an oil press, rooms for monks, and was surrounded by defensive walls" > "The complex contained two basilicas, an oil press and rooms for monks, and was surrounded by defensive walls"
- "Alexandria was founded in 332 BCE by Alexander the Great and was an important centre of arts and learning in Classical Antiquity," => "Alexandria was founded in 332 BCE by Alexander the Great and was an important centre of arts and learning in classical antiquity,"
- "There used to be a large lake in the Antiquity" => "There used to be a large lake in antiquity" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:20, 3 August 2024 (UTC)
- Fixed all, thanks! I was not sure about the Nubian monuments capitalizations but since you are the second reviewer that pointed that out, I fixed is as suggested. Tone 08:15, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
- Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 09:13, 4 August 2024 (UTC)