Wikipedia:Peer review/2005 United States Grand Prix/archive1
Any comments greatly appreciated on improvements that could be made to the above 'good article'. Kingjamie 17:13, 8 October 2006 (UTC)
- Great article. What I would like to see is a shot of the 6 cars waiting in grid position before the start of the race. Is it possible? CG 19:49, 9 October 2006 (UTC)
- Couple of points - consistency is required. Is it pitstops or pit stops? (pit stops is what's been recommended) Some of the prose needs working on "At the banked Turn 13, the entrance to the pit lane (and the turn that is the centre of the controversy), all teams that ran Michelin tyres returned to their pits, leaving just six cars to take the grid for the start of the race, from Ferrari, Jordan, and Minardi." isn't clear for example. In the lead: "The race proved to be a highly controversial monumental disaster because only six cars competed;" needs to be worked on as well. Suggest one adjective is used and if controversial be backed up with a source (should be plenty available). I'm not sure this is clear either: "Out of all of the main stations who broadcasted the grand prix, only ITV decided to screen the race and at the end of broadcast, the channel's anchorman Jim Rosenthal apologised for what viewers saw." Firstly what is a main station and also the grand prix is the race in many people's minds so the sentence doesn't make sense. All terms such as pit lane need to be wikilinked at their first occurance and some wikilinks need to be removed (there are two for Charlie Whiting, only the first occurance should be wikilinked). Finally a point to bear in mind - for an article to meet FA standards, it will need to be understood by people who don't follow F1. All technical terms must be wikilinked or explained properly. Finally a copyedit once all changes have been made to catch all those little mistakes will be needed. Hope that'll help you improve the article. Alexj2002 08:52, 10 October 2006 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Ruhrfisch 02:19, 19 October 2006 (UTC)