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Bad Romance

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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe this article is a comprehensive and informative article on one of the most popular songs to come around in contemporary times, by a tremendous popular artist. I believe with proper language correction this has a chance of becoming a Featured Article. So my fellow reviewers, please point out the flaws in the prose that you can find.

Thanks, --Legolas ^(talk2me) 05:02, 28 July 2010 (UTC)

This is my first time PR an article, but I think its a good place to start. I have to say, the overall look on the page is really good. Just scrolling down it, I come to the conclusion that the article is through, backed up with references, and can give me a fairly good understanding of Bad Romance. Nice job with that! I think articles that, when I do scroll down them, have a good amount of information are good for Wikipedia. There are some issues though that do puzzle me.

Lead

• "The video received positive response for its artistic treatment and innovation; critics complimenting its craziness and symbolic plot."

Background

• Nothing stands out to me here.

Composition

• The first paragraph of this section includes many lyrcs from the song. I don't entirely know if that is standard procedure, but maybe taking a few of the lyrics would make it's flow better? I might just be rambling here, sodon't take it as it being a major problem.

Critical reception

• ""Bad Romance" received positive reviews from critics."

Credits and personnel

• Like I said, I am not familiar with the CD articles much, but is it necesary to include this? You go from track listing to credits to charts. I think it would flow better if this was put below release history or removed altogether.

Other than those very little situations, I think the article is wonderful. A side note, would it be possible to convert the charts to prose? I try to distance myself from major charts, and even think trying to figure out how to take the usual "Superman - Best superhero (nominated)" and convert it to "Superman was nominated for best superhero in the year 2010 at the Teen Choice Awards." I think it would challenge your mind, but also improve the article. Its just a personal opinion though. ChaosMaster_Chat 21:18, 28 July 2010 (UTC)