Wikipedia:Peer review/Barry Manilow/archive1

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Barry Manilow[edit]

I would like a peer review of this page after making some major edits.

I would particularly like suggestions as to how to make it flow better given that it is reads more like a series of events.

A large amount of trivia has been moved to a sub-page, but WIKI is suggesting this should be removed. As this reprsents many peoples contributions is there a way to keep it and it still be acceptable.

Goinglogo 01:30, 22 April 2007 (UTC)

I'm one of the people who has volunteered on this article that Goinglogo mentioned before. I think our major concern is to have everything included that we have and more, but written better so that it flows better and is not WP:Fancruft. I previously attempted to get a Peer Review here around December 19, 2006, but got no input. My goal then was to turn the article from B rated to an A class article. The article most recently looked like [1] just before Goinglogo's massive facelift to the article.

I looked over Goinglogo's changes. I think it would be a good idea to have a seperate article about Manilow's medical interventions over the years, as it is all well referenced and did take up a sizeable part of the article along with the small trivia section as some raters dispise Trivia sections in biographicial article and will not give them a higher rating. I think, however, that too much was moved that is a part of the article and put on this new seperate trivia page (Manilow 1965 Playboy letter - encouraging him to try showbusiness, various times Manilow made headlines, and more mixed in besides). I do not quite understand the Emmy awards part at the bottom as Manilow has won three Emmys so far (Callback in the 1960s, The Barry Manilow Special and Music and Passion) while some of his other projects won as well for other people involved (The Third Barry Manilow Special, Copacabana movie, Big Fun on Swing Street special) and just one is mentioned on the page with other nominations his specicals received. Looking forward to any and all input on this article. 14:09, 23 April 2007 (UTC)

I have included the Playboy article in context as you suggested.
I am trying to create an awards section and I got the list of his Emmys from the Emmys website by doing a search on his name. It didn't say anything about Callback. Can you be a bit more specific?

Goinglogo 08:34, 24 April 2007 (UTC)

Goinglogo, thanks for considering my suggestion. Scooter has a blog online at [2] she has her contact information on the right column, if you need to get in touch with her. I think the Emmy for Callback is a local Emmy. The specific category and details, if any existing archives go that far back, will probably be found at the New York City local Emmys about that time or in articles Scooter has up.

Looking forward to hearing from Wikipedians out there about this article on Barry Manilow in Wikipedia. 12:42, 24 April 2007 (UTC)

P.S. A more complete list of Barry Manilow's awards to work from that includes the Emmy, Grammy, Tony, and Oscar nomination and much more can be found at [3] 12:59, 24 April 2007 (UTC)