Wikipedia:Peer review/Federalist No. 10/archive1

Federalist No. 10[edit]

I want to get some more eyes on this page to help it along toward FAC, right now I've been the only significant editor. Any ideas, thoughts, or criticisms would be welcomed. Christopher Parham (talk) 00:20, 2 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

OK - here we go(not reviewing content)!

First off, this needs a be layed out differently in general. I.E. I see 3 short sections, 1 medium-sized one, and two long ones. You should try to keep them either close to the same size, or at least get rid of the short ones.

Second paragraph in the intro needs about one more sentence
"Publication" first paragraph too short, second one is on the short side too
"The question" too short
"Publius's argument" The subsection there is kind of interesting.... I'd try to add another subsection in there or just axe the current one. In addition, esp. if you do the latter, you could help yourself by combining some paragraphs here, but its not too bad at all.
"Counterarguments of the time" - probably just "Counterarguments" would be fine here. Also, the reading here is kind of stop and go... but the two longish blockquotes here is going to make this difficult. It's ok as is, but I'd consider playing around with the text here to see if you can squeeze a bit more text from the middle of the section before and after the blockquotes where the short text is.
"Analysis" - again, blockquote makes this tricky, but try getting some more text in before the blockquote if you can
"Application" - this one looks pretty good!
"Notes" NOOO! With the well layed-out references I wasn't expecting this. Always have a description for the links, ESPECIALLY if you're going to cite them!
"External links" - usual complaint about not describing where the link goes to (in this case the University of Chicago if I gather correctly).

Ryan Norton ^{T | @ | C} 04:19, 2 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]