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Goodison Park

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to see neutral feedback.

Thanks, TheBigJagielka (talk) 13:44, 16 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Oldelpaso

My first impressions are positive. The article seems comprehensive, and sourcing wise it passes the Inglis test. Brief comments from a quick run through:

There are a few run-on sentences that need splitting or rewording (try saying "It has hosted more top-flight games than any other stadium in England and has hosted the maximum possible number of Premier League games as Everton have never been relegated from that division." aloud)
Later in the history there are a number of one or two sentence paragraphs, which disrupts the flow. Achieving a narrative feel can be damn hard, but fortunately there is some good advice at User:Tony1/How_to_satisfy_Criterion_1a#Achieving_flow.
I'm not convinced of the need for the fair-use images given that there are several free use images in the article.
External links should not appear in the prose.
A graph of average attendances could perhaps be included, like the one in Portman Road.
Before the all-seating regulations were introduced some fans would climb up and watch a football game from the church rooftop. - misleading, makes it sound like it was specifically prohibited by the Taylor Report or something.
As Goodison is a ground featuring Leitch architecture, it might be worth seeing if your local library has a copy of Engineering Archie, a book about the structures he created, for source material.

Hope this helps. If you would like further comments drop a note on my talk page. Oldelpaso (talk) 16:07, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Tim riley

Though I am not a soccer fan I enjoyed reading this article. Two tiny pedantic questions about consistency within the article:
- Orrell or Orrel? Both are used. (Having grown up in Orrell Park I have a prejudice in favour of the former.)
- St Lukes or St Luke's? Better with the apostrophe, I'd say.

I've corrected two typos ("Eveton" and "leveled"). Sorry not to be able to add anything more substantial. - Tim riley (talk) 13:54, 12 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]