Wikipedia:Peer review/Illmatic/archive2

Illmatic

This is the wikiproject hip hop's first collaboration effort. We would love it if some one took the time to provide their own feedback before we submit this article for FA-status. Thank you Chubdub 22:33, 26 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Here goes:
- The lead should be expanded. For the size of this article, WP:LEAD suggests no less than 3 paragraphs in the lead. They should concisely summarize the entire article.
- "released on April 19, 1994 through " should have a comma after 1994 (see comma (punctuation))
- According to WP:CONTEXT and WP:DATE, years without full dates should not be linked (I'll fix that)
- "MC Serch, the former member of the group" the should be changed to a
- "that Nas did not have recording contract " did not have a recording contract
- "A potent treat" Needs period.
- 'Cultural notes' should be prosified (converted into prose form) or integrated into the rest of the article.
- Per WP:MOS, "The music" should become "Music"
- Again with WP:MOS, "Music Sample" should become Music sample. However, I would suggest that the single music sample be moved into the article somewhere; for example see Music of the United States.
- Per WP:AWT, "many feared he was in the process of falling off" could use a citation. Outside of that one sentence I don't believe there are any other weasel words.
Thanks, AndyZ _t 00:08, 27 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your contributions. If you don't mind, I'm gonna post your feedback on the talkpage. Chubdub 00:53, 27 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Is it proper for an article to have a "Trivia" section. I know that by definition, its unencylopediec, and I certainly know a lot would rather have it turned into a prose, but according to WP:ALBUM:

Describe history, trivia, themes (musical or lyrical), a consideration of its specific influences, specific followers, where it fits in its genre and what leanings it may have toward others, reasons for the order of tracks (if any), etc. Also, synthesize the general critical reception of the album, being as detailed as possible.

I just want to be sure before I make any major changes to the format. Again, thanks for the advice! Chubdub 09:37, 27 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I would avoid a Trivia section if you're planning to nominate this as a FAC, it's often a reason for objections. --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 14:45, 27 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]