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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it has all the necessary information needed. Please consider that the subject of the article (musical album) was released in late december 2007, so this what so far could be collected on the subject and the article will expand as time passes. Please also note that the artcile was significantly expanded using the Hungarian version, which is a featured article in the Hungarian Wikipedia.

Thanks, Teemeah Gül Bahçesi 19:57, 9 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

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Hello, some comments from me bearing in mind a possible push to GA and beyond.

  • Use the {{Cite web}} template for an enhanced and more uniform appearance for the citations. checkY Done
  • Perhaps worth stating in the lead that Tarkan is a Turkish singer, not a band or anything. checkY Done
  • I'd suggest "sixth" and "seventh", not 6th, 7th etc. checkY Done
  • Citations are best in numerical order - e.g. in the lead you have [3][1] so reorder them. checkY Done
  • " 25 December, 2007 " and "25th December", 2008" - be consistent and avoid "st" etc. checkY Done
  • "equals a diamond award" don't like that phrase, perhaps something like "gaining diamond certification"? checkY Done
  • WP:HEAD suggests not using "The" as in "The songs", "The album" etc. Just "Songs" "Album" is fine etc. checkY Done
  • "Tarkan denied all previous news" -what news? checkY Done
  • "this image has not yet been familiar for fans, which also justifies the title" reads strangely to me... checkY Done
  • The discussion over the songs is alright, I suppose, but borders on trivia really.
  • Per WP:CITE, avoid spaces between punctuation and citations. checkY Done
  • "hihg " typo - check the whole article for others. checkY Done
  • "TTNetMüzik" or "TTNet", or are they different? checkY Done
  • "the same exact shiny " exact is redundant here. checkY Done
  • "Then, according to the official website, he is about to perform " not great English. checkY Done
  • Criticism section should really be trimmed down and converted to prose rather than a bunch of bullet point quotations.
  • " don't know anything baout " - avoid "don't" - use "do not" and another typo... checkY Done
  • There's a mix of British and US English. Pick one and stick with it. checkY Done
  • "a short thanking note " again, not great in English. checkY Done

In general it could do with a thorough copyedit (perhaps see if WP:LOCE can help) before it could be submitted at WP:GAN... All the best. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:52, 17 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I will try to follow your suggestions. --Teemeah Gül Bahçesi 19:05, 17 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]