Wikipedia:Peer review/New York Yankees/archive2

New York Yankees

This article has recently passed GA-status but I still think it has some kinks that need to be worked out. I would love to hear some outside opinions on how this can be worked towards a featured article. For an archived peer review, see Archive 1. Sportskido8 17:08, 5 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

This poor, lonely Peer Review looks like it needs some love. I've noticed some things that might need fixing:

The lead does not state when the franchise changed its name from the Highlanders to the Yankees. It also does not explain the wild card very well (for the non-baseball-savvy), or wikilink an article (not sure if there is one). Done
Known as the Western League until 1899, the AL carried over five of its previous locations and added teams in three East Coast cities, including Baltimore, Maryland. This sentence is a bit unclear. Done
Image:NYYLogos PrintNY1907.png could use a caption instead of being a bare image. Done
The "Franchise history" section needs some citations. It is also far too long...essentially a copy of the article History of the New York Yankees. I think a large majority of the section can be cut, since one click leads the reader to the same information.

This is after reading only up to "New Owners, A New Home, and a New Name (1913-1922)". I will try to review more later. -Running On Brains 01:37, 29 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Some sub-sections which could use a good trim:

New Owners, A New Home, and a New Name (1913-1922): Has an awful lot of newspaper headlines and specific instances where the word "Yankee" appeared in the media, most of which could be lost without impact to the article. Also, the paragraph on the "NY" logo could go, just leaving the note about the officiality of the franchise names.
The Ruth and Gehrig era and the Stadium (1923-1935): The second-to-last paragraph can be taken out completely.
The DiMaggio era (1936-1951): DiMaggio's hitting streak can be reduced to one or two sentences from the three paragraphs it currently holds.

And in general, just condense information that isn't essential to telling the story of the Yankee's franchise. History of the New York Yankees is an excellent article, but a lot of the info there is just clutter on this main page. -Running On Brains 10:57, 30 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

A few more suggestions:

I'm not sure about the fair use rationale for Image:TorrePoster.PNG in the context of this article. It's ok for now, but it might be brought up as a point of contention at WP:FAC.
The New Yankee Stadium needs a citation or two. An image of construction or an artists's rendition of the future statium would be great.
In Design, the note about the Knicks is probably not needed.
They are also one of the few teams in Major League Baseball to shun the trend of creating a "third jersey". What is a third jersey?
Not sure if the bit about the near-uniform change in 1974 warrants inclusion.
in the dawn of their new dynasty quite over-dramatic, no?
Mention of "Freddy" and "The Bleacher Creatures" should be in terms of one or two sentences, not several paragraphs.
In general, more references all around

Again, these are all just suggestions, so ignore anything you think is unreasonable. I just hate to see articles go this long on Peer Review without so much as a peep. Feel free to contact me here or on my talk page if you have questions/comments. -Running On Brains 11:16, 30 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking the time to review this. I agree with most of your points and I'll try to fix most of them at some point. Sportskido8 01:10, 2 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]