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Sassanid Empire

Sassanids era was one of the most important periods in the prolonged History of Iran. It had a definitive impact on the its neighbouring cultures and played an important role in late antiquity. I've been working on this article for three months and I believe I've covered everything that needs to be covered to an adequate level. I want to nominate it for feature article candidates and I just wanted to see if its good enough. Amir85 23:02, 20 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've copyedited the first part of this, through the end of the history section; I'll come back and do more later if I have time. This needs some serious work, though, if its going to be FA. There's good information here, but it isn't being presented well enough yet.
Three things to work on:
1. Flow. What is the narrative structure of this article? Is it chronological, or topical? Right now, it jumps back and forth between the two rather unpredictably, and many issues are discussed in two or more distinct sections--often redundantly. Create a plan for the overall strucure of the article and rearrange accordingly.
2. Referencing. An article this size will need a lot of footnotes (or other inline citations, if you prefer) to be FA caliber. Plan on citing your source for every little known fact and every judgement or opinion, and possibly cite each section to a general source that contains the basic facts of that section.
3. Writing. Right now, the prose in this article is of spotty quality. Some sections are quite good, others are in bad shape. I'm giving it as good a going over as I can, but the more attention that gets turned on this the merrier. On the same subject, remove any judgements that cannot be cited to a source, and state those that remain as the opinion of that source rather than as fact.

There are smaller issues as well, but these three are the big ones. I'll do what i can for the writing issue, but someone with the knowledge and the sources needs to address the first two. Robth^Talk 00:30, 21 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Of course the requests for expansion statements will have to be removed before nominating as FAC. Ensure that the Main article: xxx and See also: xxx at the top of summarized sections conforms to Wikipedia:Section#Body sections. Orient the images so not to squeeze the text between them like in "Art and science". Do not have one-sentence paragraphs like "In modern media". Also, concerning that section, I do not think the Sassanid Empire had much to do with the development of the game but if the section is not going to be removed expand to include other forms of media like novels, documentaries, etc. and do not simply acknowledge their existence but rather explain how the Sassanid Empire is portrayed. --maclean25 19:31, 21 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]