Wikipedia:Peer review/Stellar rotation/archive1
I'd like to bring this up to good article quality. Please let me know what needs to be improved. Thank you. — RJH (talk) 20:56, 3 July 2007 (UTC)
- The caption of Image:Achernar.jpg does not label it as a drawing. Readers might mistake it for a photograph.
- The article uses the term "centripetal force" when it appears to mean "centrifugal force." Centripetal forces are directed toward the center, but the article uses the term to mean forces that point away from the center.
- The sentence "Unless a star is being observed from the direction of a pole, portions of the surface are moving relative to an observer." is misleading, since even for observation from the direction of a pole, there is relative motion (but not the relative motion in the radial direction that gives rise to the nonrelativistic Doppler shift).
- Thank you. — RJH (talk) 18:26, 9 July 2007 (UTC)
This article lost me a bit so this not the most through review, but there are some things I noticed
- Parenthetical phrases need to be rewritten. Maybe you need to change the order of some things so these qualifications are not necessary, but I am unsure if that would be wise.
- The text talks about the direction of the "observer" but the illustration labels this "Earth". I understand this, but the reader should not have to translate terms between the text and the image.
- The lead only summarizes the first part of the article
Good luck I will try and look over again another and see if I can focus on it better then.--BirgitteSB 20:28, 13 July 2007 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I'll try to address your concerns. If you could let me know what parts you found unclear I'll attempt to clarify the text. — RJH (talk) 14:47, 18 July 2007 (UTC)