Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 January 28

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User:Cloud21pr/Chris Brown[edit]

This page is about Chris Brown. He is an American Business person and politician who is currently running for Los Angeles City Council Elections from District 10.

Cloud21pr (talk) 01:27, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

The inline citations in the article are supposed to go next to the statement that the article verifies, not all in the 'references' section. I can help you if you want, if you're having trouble. Chevymontecarlo 07:06, 29 January 2011 (UTC)

Imedia entertainment[edit]

Hi, I would like to get feedback from the proposed wikipedia addition. I have tried to include notable and reliable sources for my information inclusion. I now request feedback for the article and if suitable then add to the wikipedia entries.

Many thanks

Johnranger (talk) 01:55, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

The article already appears to be in the 'main space'. Actually I think the article is okay but it could do with some expansion. The references need some work as well; according to WP:CITE Wikipedia cannot be used as a reference. Chevymontecarlo 07:08, 29 January 2011 (UTC)

Riley Costello (actor)[edit]

Booth088 (talk) 04:10, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

I removed the 'unreviewed' tag.

There are unreferenced facts, which need either referencing or removing.

Movie/play titles should be in italics - I fixed those.

It could do with some independent reliable sources, e.g. newspaper articles about the person, to meet the notability guidelines.  Chzz  ►  16:38, 30 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Cavenman/Halls Tainted Red[edit]

I have found many sources for Halls Tainted Red. I would like to be sure that the page I have organized based on my online findings is wiki worthy. i

Cavenman (talk) 04:57, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

Your article appears to have extensive WP:COPYVIO issues (see here). If it weren't in your userspace, I'd have immediately nominated it for speedy deletion per WP:CSD#G12. As it is, you ought to remove all copyrighted material immediately from this draft. It will not be acceptable for any of it to appear in a mainspace article.
(Question for someone who knows: should this be speedy deleted anyway, even though it's in userspace...?) WikiDao 21:53, 29 January 2011 (UTC)
WikiDao - yep.
Copyright violation is illegal, and needs to be removed, no matter where it is. CSD G12 applies to all namespaces ("G" for "General").
The author had, actually, edited the page and left it blank. To avoid problems, I asked for deletion under "author blanked", and it has now gone.
Caveman, you need to start from scratch, writing in your own words, using reliable sources as references, to support all claims. Please, see WP:FIRST. Thanks,  Chzz  ►  16:02, 30 January 2011 (UTC)


I've finished my first wikipedia page and would like comment. I have added references but should I add more? I am planning to add more content once my I have confirmed I doing things correctly.

Matthewfairpensions (talk) 10:33, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

It looks like your article was deleted as blatant advertising. I would recommend reading WP:COI, WP:CORP, and WP:N. It is probably better for you not to write an article about a company you're affiliated with. Calliopejen1 (talk) 20:06, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Klimama/Climate Protection Agency (Mannheim)[edit]

Hello, this is my first Wikipedia page so I need feedback! It is about the Climate Protection Agency in Mannheim. Many Climate Protection Agencies are being founded in Germany and other countries in order to carry out climate protection and energy related measures decided on national and local scales.

I would hate for my work to disappear into the deleted section so please do tell me if something is lacking.

Klimama (talk) 10:33, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

I've added citation templates to the references, to add details; see {{cite web}} and the edits I made.
I'm concerned that, possibly, it depends on primary sources. It would be nice to see references to articles in newspapers - something truly independent of the subject. It needs that, to meet notability guidelines - see WP:VRS.
Also, there are unreferenced facts - such as, It was founded in 2009..., There are five full time staff, In April 2010 Mannheim became a signatory to the Covenant of Mayors. There are others.
If some of those claims are covered by references you already used, then you need to repeat them. Chzz  ►  16:11, 30 January 2011 (UTC)

User:JimVS/Marathon Java GUI Testing[edit]

I would like to promote this page to a full Wikipedia page but would like some review before doing so.

I am relatively unbiased on this topic. My reasoning for writing this page is I had spent considerable time researching GUI testing tools for a project I am working on. I started by looking though Wikipedia which led me to Abbot, a very similar tool to Marathon. Abbot's failing though is it is now an "orphaned" open source project whereas Marathon is very robust. I had to widen my Internet search before coming across Marathon, which is an active robust open source project and very useful for my testing purposes.

Hence I would like to add Marathon to Wikipedia and include it in the same lists (see GUI software testing) as Abbot. I'm doing this as a service to others who may need to find a good Swing testing tool.

JimVS (talk) 11:22, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

For inclusion, an article needs 'significant coverage in reliable sources that are independent of the subject' - WP:VRS - and I can't see that; your own comment of "There are only a few references to the Marathon testing tool" seems to agree. I'm sorry; I am not convinced it meets the requirements. Chzz  ►  16:13, 30 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Acaw/Institute of Food Science & Technology[edit]

I would like feedback so I can put this page up please.

Acaw (talk) 15:45, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

Please see the request immediately above - same thing. WP:VRS, WP:GNG, WP:ORG.  Chzz  ►  16:14, 30 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Swelgemoed/effect of TMC125 on the pharmacokinetics of oral contraceptives[edit]

Please could you assist me in a reviewing the page, we would like to get this publication live on Wikipedia. Any advice will be much appreciated

Swelgemoed (talk) 16:00, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

This sort of article is not an appropriate submission for Wikipedia. Wikipedia does not have pages for individual experiments or papers. It would be better to add one sentence about the results of the study to an appropriate article (e.g. oral contraceptive or something like that), and cite the study as a reference. Calliopejen1 (talk) 20:09, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Chicago2011/Peru Public Schools[edit]

I'm looking for any helpful comments or suggestions to ensure this article is published on the first go. Thanks!

Chicago2011 (talk) 17:12, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

Remove the name of the Superintendent - see WP:NPF.
"History" has no references; all facts need reliable sources.
Try to add more independent reliable sources - such as, newspaper articles about the school.
Fix the == External links == - it has ""  Chzz  ►  16:17, 30 January 2011 (UTC)

User:A todo color/Javier Gonzalez Q. -- abcdespañol[edit]

I want to publish this entry. Please provide feedback and information on how to make public after corrections have been made.

Thank you.

A todo color (talk) 18:13, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

It is not neutral - e.g. "dedicated his life to education. He seeks to transform routine teaching into dynamic learning" or "abcdespañol continues to be a reliable and useful tool"
It does not have references for facts - e.g. "Trained as a schoolteacher, Javier worked in small village close to his hometown of Manizales" - where can we check that?
It uses references which are not reliable sources - such as a YouTube video on and a blog
See WP:PILLAR, WP:FIRST.  Chzz  ►  16:30, 30 January 2011 (UTC)

List of 2012 adherents[edit]

This is a simple list of adherents to a belief in this phenomenon.

The list itself includes the references to the specific public statements of their belief in the phenomenon - namely books, websites, speeches, interviews and other statements. I've assumed that the references to these various publications are sufficient references in themselves for inclusion in such a list.

  • Since it is not intended as a bibliography, I have stripped out from the book references unnecessary details such as publishers and ISBNs.
  • For the websites, I've included the name of the website, though not linked. I've also included the registrant. It seems to me this has some bearing on whether the person named in the site as making the claims, really was the person doing so.

However I would like any useful guidance on this way of treating the references.

Or, if you feel you know what you're doing, please feel free to change the way I've done this.

This list is meant to serve simply as a permanent public reference list of those who have published material in support of belief in this phenomenon.

(For the record, I am utterly agnostic about the phenomenon and know little about it. However it is clearly something that is influencing the public discourse. Therefore I do think it is useful and relevant for the public to have a record of those who supported belief in the phenomenon. Such a list will no doubt grow in relevance after the year 2012 has passed.)

Zenji (talk) 19:43, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

Even then I still think you need reliable sources to verify the statements in your article, otherwise the article is likely to just get deleted for lack of sources. Use inline citations to display these references. Chevymontecarlo 07:03, 29 January 2011 (UTC)
Agree: if you have the source information on hand, you should definitely do a full inline citation for each one. If you could pick a single quote from each one that seems to sum up each "adherent's" views on the matter, you should include the quote and cite the page numbers in the book in those inline citations (also btw, you may wish to use the {{Cite book}} template for that). WikiDao 21:31, 29 January 2011 (UTC)

User:Gstadig/Eric William Ott[edit]

I would like to get feedback on this page. Looking for comments or suggestion so it may be published on the first pass. Thanks in advance

Gstadig (talk) 20:58, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

I think the article would benefit from the addition of an infobox, inline citations to display your references 'correctly'. The article also seems to be lacking in links, so consider adding some of those. Good luck. Chevymontecarlo 07:00, 29 January 2011 (UTC)

Timeline of Spanish history (Hispania)[edit]

This article is a timeline based on articles published in Wikipedia, all of them converging to the main article mentioned in my article. The images incorporated in the article were made by me. All of them have the sources identified.

Alcides Pinto (talk) 23:49, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

It certainly seems that you've done a lot of work with the article but to be honest there's no reliable references to cite your sources; it seems to be a bit lacking. Chevymontecarlo 06:57, 29 January 2011 (UTC)