Wikipedia:WikiProject China/Peer review/Zhou Tong (monk)
I've had this article peer reviewed twice by the general wiki populace, but nobody really seems to care about it. So I figured since WikiProject China has a banner on the article's talk page, you guys should review it as well. Fire away and be truthful! And if you see anything that's horribly wrong, FIX IT! Just don't delete any of the info without discussing it here or on my or the article's talk page first.
I also wanted to note that my description of Zhou Tong's part in Yue Fei's Fictional biography HERE is a bit choppy. Could someone rewrite it if they deem it necessary? If you need more info, I can provide it to you.
Before I go, I just want to note that I am very surprised that more people haven't tried to contribute to this article. Everybody loves Song Dynasty General Yue Fei, but no one really cares about his mystery teacher Jow Tong. Anyway, good luck!(Ghostexorcist 21:47, 29 December 2006 (UTC))
- Amazing work! Should be a potential FA candidate with some work. I haven't done any real peer review in the past, so I may be incorrect:
- The lead section is rather short, and it is only the first paragraph that summarize the article. The summary doesn't really summarize the entire article clearly in my opinion, as I only get to know that he is a teacher to certain figures. The second paragraph of the lead can be trasfered to a infobox like in this article.
- The second section, "Yue Fei's biographies" looks kind of weird in the article. I think it might be better if you merge the content there into the "Background" section, and make the Background section stay as the second section of the article.
- The "Skills" section looks kind of unorganized in style. It might be better if you sort it under section headers (====) and expand the short ones, "Chinese Bow", "18 Weapons of War", "Elephant Style" and "Chuojiao". Is it possible for you to find more information on those? Maybe you can talk more about what these skills are about.
That's it for now. Again, good work! AQu01rius (User • Talk) 04:04, 30 December 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks for your comments. I've changed the page around to meet your suggestions. I've added an info box and merged the 'Background' and 'Yue Fei's Biographies' sections into one. I'll try my best to clean up the 'skills' section. Unfortunately, there is not a lot of info about Zhou Tong's involvement with the martial arts styles that I cited. The info covered is the only info I could find on the subject. I look forward to more comments from other readers.(Ghostexorcist 12:33, 30 December 2006 (UTC))
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I am only interested in digging for and then presenting the material in bulk. I admit my skill of ‘summarizing’ the entire page into a neat 3-4 paragraph lead is not very good. I would appreciate it if someone could do this for me. I've done the hardest part and found the info, now all you have to do is summarize it. Thank you in advance to anyone who attempts this! (Ghostexorcist 00:00, 31 December 2006 (UTC))