Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Lympne Airport
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I've listed this article for peer review because… I would like to get this to FA status. The article has had a copyedit as part of the GA process, and it is now GA rated. The basic military history of RAF Lympne / RNAS Lympne / HMS Buzzard / HMS Daedalus II is covered in the Lympne Airport article, with details of units etc in the RAF Lympne article. Mjroots (talk) 06:29, 5 April 2011 (UTC)
AustralianRupert
[edit]Good work so far, I have the following suggestions:
- in the lead, I suggest mentioning the First World War in this sentence: "RFC Lympne was originally an acceptance point for aircraft being delivered to, and returning from, France during the First World War". This will provide a little bit more context;
Done, I've also expanded the lede a little to locate Kent, as we are supposed to be writing for a global readership. Mjroots (talk) 06:40, 17 April 2011 (UTC)
- in the Civil operations section, this probably needs endashes instead of hyphens: "Leeds-Lympne-Amsterdam service", particularly as you use them later, for instance in: "Lympne–Edenbridge–Caterham–Croydon route";
- I'm not a fan of dashes I can't type on my keyboard. Am aware of the big row currently running over the use of various dashes and hyphens.
- in the 1951-60 section, there appears to be a broken "clarify" tag here: "Permission had been granted for the use of these aircraft for freight operations and it was intended to introduce them on 1 April 1955.{{clarify|and did they?";
- I've removed the broken tag. It is clear that the intention was introduction, but I've not found a reference to support actual introduction on that date. Saying that it happened without backup strays into WP:OR territory. Mjroots (talk) 06:40, 17 April 2011 (UTC)
- in the Pre-war air races section, is there a citation for the list of "Races at Lympne"?
- in the Post-war air races section, is there are citation for the list (as above)?
- in the References section there is a slight inconsistency in the citations. For example # 1 "Delve 2005, p. 168." (this uses a full stop after the "p" for page), but compare to # 7 (no full stop after the "p");
- Book refs use a full stop, Flight refs don't. I suppose for consistency they should all use one format. Will attend to this later. Mjroots (talk) 06:40, 17 April 2011 (UTC)
Done All page refs now using "p." Mjroots (talk) 10:20, 17 April 2011 (UTC)
- in the References, I think there are a couple of typos in this title: "Citzen Airmen in Training. Reuslts of First Camps. A New Squadron";
- in the References, in # 190, there is a capitalisation issue: "flight International". I think it should be "Flight International". AustralianRupert (talk) 06:24, 13 April 2011 (UTC)
Dank
[edit]As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. Please check the edit summaries. I made the following changes:
- "as the Air Ministry could not justify keeping the two bases open following the end of the war—they decided to retain Hawkinge." I changed the dash to a comma.
- "there was no permanent customs officer there, a telephone call to Folkestone Harbour was needed to clear customs.": comma splice
- "civil flying": "civilian" is more common.
- "78 feet (24 m) high mast": 78-foot (24 m) high mast