Talk:Claire Taylor/GA1
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Reviewer: Sahara4u (talk · contribs) 12:19, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
- Image needs alt text.
- What MBE stands for?
- “…..represented England over 150 times…..” in what? Tests, ODIs, T20Is or combined?
- “…..2005 World Cup resulted in her resuming her career alongside her cricket.” Could you please rephrase this? 3 “her” in the last segment.
- “…2007 and 2008, and she won the award in 2009.” No need of “she”.
- “….leading run-scorer in that year's Women's Cricket World Cup”. Which year?
Early life and career[edit]
- “…was born in Amersham, Buckinghamshire on 25 September 1975.[1] She was born…” 2 consecutive sentences with “was born”.
- “Although she primarily played hockey as a teenager, in which she represented England at Under-17 and Under-19 as a forward,…” ---> “Although primarily played hockey as a teenager, she represented England at Under-17 and Under-19 as a forward,”
- “Taylor earnt three Blues for hockey,…” ---> earned?
- What is a half blue? Explaination needed.
- “…Thames Valley, and she scored her maiden century in the women's County Championship,…” No need of “she”, and a link to century.
- Is “Lancashire and Cheshire” one team?
International breakthrough[edit]
- “Taylor's highest score in the series was 12 runs, and she had batting averages of 11.00 in the ODIs……” ---> No need of “she”
- “She struck her first century in international cricket, remaining 137 not out against Sri Lanka.” ---> scoring 137 not out?
- “…fifth wicket in women's One Day Internationals.” ---> ODIs
Full-time cricketer[edit]
- Image needs alt text.
- “and Australia won all five of the matches between the sides:…”---> all five matches
- “….averaged below twenty.” ---> 20.00?
Further development[edit]
- Image needs alt text.
- “Further development”--> may be “Further improvement”?
- “After the World Cup, Taylor was disheartened….”--> which world cup?
- “….batting averages in the 2006 Super Fours competition in which she scored two centuries and two half-centuries in six matches for the Sapphires.[64]” --> competitions, scoring two centuries and two half-centuries in six matches for the Sapphires.[64]”
- “….the innings, scoring 9 fours in her 151-ball innings.[69]” --> “hitting 9 fours” since you have already used “scored” in the sentence.
- “The score was the highest of Taylor's ODI career,[1] and is the joint fourth-highest total in women's ODI cricket.[n 1][70] The score is also….” --> both sentences start with “The score”. Can you make a slight change in the last one.
- “….best performer with the bat.” You may link the bat.
- “five appearances in that competition.[74]” ---> those competitions?
- You are using “Twenty20 matches” throughout the article. Aren’t they Internationals? And also need abbreviation to Twenty20 Internationals.
- I link to Women's Twenty20 International (I actually previously linked to Twenty20 International, but anyway..) on the first major usage. After the fact is that they are Twenty20 matches against other nations, so the way I've written it is entirely correct. And I despise the abbreviation T20I, so simply haven't used it! Harrias talk 14:02, 18 November 2012 (UTC)
- “…., in which Taylor made three scores of 20 or more…”---> Taylor scored 20 or more on three different occasions?
Leading batsman[edit]
- “After the third match of the series was abandoned without any play…” Why? Can you clarify this?
- “In a two match ODI series against the West Indies….” A link to West Indies
- “She struck seven fours during her 70-ball innings, in which she scored 83 runs.”--->may be “She struck seven fours during her 70-ball innings and scored 83 runs.”
Double world champions[edit]
- Image needs alt text.
- “In the five match series,…” ---> five-match
- “…including four fours, before being bowled.” You’ve used “9 fours” earlier in the article, so this should be “4 fours”.
- “…against Australia in the semi-finals.” semi-final?
References[edit]
- Ref # 50 is not formatted correctly
- Ref # 107 needs author
- You are using slashes in some refs while in others ndashes. I think this needs consistency.
Bibliography[edit]
- Commons template for Claire Taylor under Bibliography.
Images[edit]
No issues, only need alt text as I mentioned above.
Further comments[edit]
- You may add her “T20I debut” and “Last T20I” to the infobox.
- The convention is to only list T20I if they haven't played Tests: from Template:Infobox cricketer "Only use the following if an international has only played T20I matches (or possibly only one of the above forms). At all times, only 2 sets of match info must be displayed (for space reasons):" Harrias talk 10:14, 19 November 2012 (UTC)
- Link Sri Lanka in the lede.
- Link hockey
- Link century
- She struck her first century in international cricket, scoring 137 not out against Sri Lanka.[22] ---> may be Semicolon instead of comma.
- New Zealand chased down the total in under 36 overs.[75][76] --->. New Zealand chased down the total in fewer than 36 overs.?
- In the five-match series, which England won 4–0, Taylor remained not out in each of her three innings, scoring 125 runs.[97] ---> Semicolon instead of comma after 4–0.
- and then an unbeaten 166 runs against a side from Gauteng and North West.[48] --> aside?
- Captions of the last two images start with “Taylor batting….”. I think these should be “Taylor’s batting….”.
- As of August 2012 (in the Notes) ---> As of November 2012.
Zia Khan 06:26, 19 November 2012 (UTC)
Overall, good work with the article and I hope the concerns will be addressed ASAP. I'll take another look before passing it to a GA status. Thanks, Zia Khan 15:19, 17 November 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks, as always, for your review. I've responded to each of your points above, and look forward to any further comments. Harrias talk 14:02, 18 November 2012 (UTC)
Final assessment[edit]
- GA review (see Wikipedia:Good article criteria and WP:GACN)
- Well written.
- a (clear and concise prose which doesn't violate copyright laws, grammar and spelling are correct): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, and fiction:
- a (clear and concise prose which doesn't violate copyright laws, grammar and spelling are correct): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, and fiction:
- Factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (well-referenced): b (citations to reliable sources): c (Wikipedia:No original research):
- a (well-referenced): b (citations to reliable sources): c (Wikipedia:No original research):
- Broad in its coverage.
- a (covers major aspects): b (well-focused):
- a (covers major aspects): b (well-focused):
- Neutral .
- Fair representation, no bias:
- Fair representation, no bias:
- Stable.
- No edit wars nor disputed contents:
- No edit wars nor disputed contents:
- Illustrated appropriately by images.
- a b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Conclusion:I don't see any other issues. Good work, keep it up! Zia Khan 12:15, 19 November 2012 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: