Talk:Siege of Knoxville

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:46, 7 May 2022 (UTC)

I'll look at this one soon. Hog Farm _Talk 23:46, 7 May 2022 (UTC)

I just traded a book about the history of Catholicism in America for Piston's bio of Longstreet; I can look in there to see if there's anything significant if you would like. Hog Farm _Talk 23:52, 7 May 2022 (UTC)

• The lead is organized a bit oddly - IMO it would make more sense to discuss the background of Burnside's campaigning before discussing the details of the siege itself.
  •  Done The lede has been re-ordered.
• " and 4,391 troops in the Left Wing" - is this Willcox?
  • The list of unit strengths (IX Corps, XXIII Corps infantry, cavalry, and Left Wing) is followed by a sentence naming the commanders (Potter, Manson, Shackelford, and Willcox).
• "The commander of the 15th South Carolina, Major William M. Gist was killed" - I believe there should be a comma after Gist, although I'm not great with commas so I'll recuse on making the change myself
  •  Done
• "A fieldwork that the Confederates called Fort Loudon was renamed Fort Sanders on November 24" - this could use some elaboration here. Is Fort Loudon a Union work the Confederates gave the name Fort Loudon to (like the "Fort Hell" and "Fort Damnation" at Petersburg), a Confederate work the Union later captured and renamed, or a work the Confederates built and gave the name Sanders for some reason?
  •  Done Is that better?
• How many of the James rifles were in Fort Huntington Smith?
  •  Done Added the word "several". Hess did not specify the number of guns. Henshaw's battery had two 3.8-inch James rifles. Sims' battery had an unknown number of those weapons.

Ready for Kingston, pausing for now. Hog Farm _Talk 21:29, 8 May 2022 (UTC)

• "However, Wheeler was ultimately thwarted when his troopers ran into Knoxville's infantry defenders on the south bank." - is this the Tennessee? The infobox map suggests the defenses were instead along the Holston
  •  Done Add "Tennessee River". Modern maps (including Hess) show the Tennessee River flowing past the center of Knoxville. However, a short distance upstream, the Holston and French Broad Rivers join to form the Tennessee. Poe's map and the infobox map show the Holston River. I added a footnote (1) explaining this.
• "By the evening of December 5, Howard's troops reached Louisville while the soldiers of Granger" - recommend making it clearer that this is Louisville, Tennessee, as Louisville, Kentucky is what everyone's going to be thinking for the Tennessee/Kentucky region
  •  Done
• Sourcing is a bit heavy on Hess, but that's understandable and okay for GA because IIRC Hess is the main modern source for this campaign. Hog Farm _Talk 15:32, 9 May 2022 (UTC)