User talk:Bbattel358

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Welcome!

Hello, Bbattel358, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:13, 24 September 2018 (UTC)

removing contribution to technology governance

Hi Bbattel358, I just wanted you to know that I removed this contribution [1] from technology governance. I removed it because your citation was to a journal that is considered predatory, and is therefore not considered a reliable source. Please see this resource on how to identify reliable sources. Sources must be reliable to provide verifiability. Thanks! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:37, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback on recent creation

Hi Bbattel358, I wanted to let you know that I moved your creation from the mainspace to your user space (User:Bbattel358/Draft:The growth and increased use of computers in the world). I have judged that it is not yet ready for readers for several reasons. It is not proper to have a "note from author" section to say "This is an unfinished version of my article and it is still being edited. I am publishing for now as it is required for my college course." If an article is not ready for mainspace, then it should not be in mainspace, regardless of the requirements of your course.

Furthermore, your article most resembles an essay, and Wikipedia articles are not essays. For your future contributions, you should read the resource on writing with an encyclopedic tone. Furthermore, I think that this content is a likely content fork. If you want to write about the subject matter in the draft, it is a good idea to look at existing articles such as Technology and society or the "computer" article section on modern computers. Let me know if you have questions. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:19, 2 November 2018 (UTC)

More feedback on the growth and increased use of computers in the world

Hi Bbattel358, you inappropriately moved your page, and it is possible that it will get deleted. Instead of moving it to "article space" or "mainspace," you moved it to userspace (User:The Rapid Growth of Computers). Therefore, it is as if you created a user account under the name "The Rapid Growth of Computers". As I pointed out to you above, this article still reads like an essay. Instead of having a lead paragraph (MOS:LEAD) that adequately summarizes the article, you have an introduction where you try to "hook" the reader. This introduction is not referenced at all, because it's pretty much all your opinion. Wikipedia is an encyclopedia. Encyclopedias have neutral phrasing, and do not generally use bombastic, editorializing language such as "each taking leaps and bounds," "Fast forward several decades," or "computers were a sensation everywhere."

Wikipedia articles do not contain vague weasel words such as here when you said "Computers go much farther back then most people think" "Most people"? Who? Says who? No citation? Then it's not verifiable because it's a conclusion you drew yourself. It's original research. Please take time to learn and understand these Wikipedia policies if you would like to contribute here. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:58, 21 November 2018 (UTC)