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Welcome![edit]

Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for dropping by to say hi. Here's a cute kitten picture. :) Please don't hesitate to ask if you need anything! All the best, Keilana|Parlez ici 17:37, 12 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I am in your group! Ran21 (talk) 00:01, 10 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Spring 2015[edit]

Hi! I'm excited to work on the plastic pollution page with you! CiKay (talk) 21:41, 13 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hey! I'm looking forward to expanding the plastic pollution page with you! bellre (talk) 15 February 2015 (UTC)

November 2013[edit]

Hello, I'm Antiqueight. I noticed that you recently removed all content from Angiopoietin: Functions and Mechanisms, with this edit, without explaining why. In the future, it would be helpful to others if you described your changes to Wikipedia with an edit summary. If this was a mistake, don't worry, I restored the page's content. If you think I made a mistake, or if you have any questions, you can leave me a message on my talk page. Thanks. 🍺 Antiqueight confer 16:09, 4 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work![edit]

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Posted automatically via sandbox guided tour. Mbeez (talk) 20:39, 31 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Introducing myself[edit]

Hi Mbeez. I work with the Wiki Education Foundation, and help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment. If there's anything I can do to help with your assignment (or, for that matter, any other aspect of Wikipedia) please feel free to drop me a note. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:38, 4 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Welcome and best wishes[edit]

I have been asking students in this class to be careful if they are planning to edit an article on a chemical topic. judging from your edit history, it appears that you have a lot of editing experience. As such it would be great if you you could explain that while Wikipedia is a great venue to learn though, it is an encyclopedia first and foremost. Some tips were offered to your teacher here. Your editing and technical experience should be very helpful to other students in this class. Best wishes, --Smokefoot (talk) 01:28, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing Plastic Pollution article and suggestions for improvement[edit]

Great article so far, I thought it had a lot of solid information, good references/citations but was just lacking overall in cohesiveness and structure/organization. This will greatly improve the facts and studies you have worked so hard to accumulate just by making the article flow and easier to understand/follow.

Here are some of my suggestions for improvement: - Perhaps add a heading called "Chemical decomposition" after composition and move the associated facts there, or at least separate them - Instead of title “plastic debris” say “Types of plastic debris” since they are then listed - Make sure to specify that macro and megadebris are same thing, especially since article you cite uses term megadebris where you use macro in defining - For term “ghost nests” I would use quotation marks, unless this is common term I am unfamiliar with - I think it'd be useful to reorganize your "Effects on Environment" subtopics, and give "Sources" its own topic heading altogether to separate Ocean/Land sources since they break up environmental effects section

In "Ocean-Based Sources of Ocean Plastic Pollution" the following statements are somewhat too opinionated/not backed by fact? Your text: "Naval and research vessels also eject waste and military equipment that are no longer necessary. Pleasure crafts also release fishing gear and other types of waste. These different ships do not have enough storage space to keep these pollutants on the ship, so they are purposely discarded."

This makes it sound like navy and fishing boats just throw things in water for fun? Maybe make it more passive than direct statement, avoid "Purposely discarded"? Could say "If these ships do not have enough storage space, they may discard them into the ocean."

Under Land-Based Sources of Ocean Plastic Pollution: This statement: Because of plastic’s durability, discarding plastics in this way is merely storing them for some time in the future when accumulation becomes a larger problem.

^ For some reason this sounds like an opinion to me, maybe consider revising?

Under "Effects on Animals" - and subheading "Defects in Animals" perhaps you could specify "Physical defects" since these are the only kind you list and then if you were to do any kind of endocrine disruption that would be a separate section anyway?

The "Ingestion" Section needs fixing up - it is not cohesive or well synthesized in general - tends to jump around from study to study. Perhaps this could be remedied by organizing the sections by the type of animal i.e. a "Bird ingestion" section, a "pelagic animal" or "sea animal" section for fish/sea turtles?

For "Effects on Humans" section: Be more succinct in the opening, especially if you are breaking down into subtopics.

This statement seems randomly/out of place? "It can also affect humans in which it may create an eyesore that interferes with enjoyment of the natural environment."


Finally, your "Reductions" section is really great! I just had one question about this sentence "Many studies have been done concerning the gaseous emissions that result from the incineration process." under "Incineration" - was wondering if you had a source or something to clarify this statement, and if not it is not really even necessary? What is this doing for your overall article - saying that there have been studies done, try to ask "so what?"

Going to do some minor copy-editing in the following sections: 1) Effects on Environment: Landfill & Ocean 2) Effects on Humans

Sorry for the long review, not meaning to be super critical but I think you guys are doing great was just some little things here and there to fix to make it awesome! Keep up the good work!

Mantareina (talk) 03:59, 31 March 2015 (UTC)Mantareina[reply]

Thank you for your feedback, Mantareina! :) Mbeez (talk) 16:36, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Mantareina: on what basis are you making this review - are you a scholar on plastic pollution? If you are another student in the same class, I think that you could related your commentary to your fellow students in person vs putting it here.--Smokefoot (talk) 13:21, 31 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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