Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by Daniel Vettori/archive1

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The list was archived by Crisco 1492 08:52, 19 July 2014 [1].

List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by Daniel Vettori[edit]

Featured list candidates/List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by Daniel Vettori/archive1

Nominator(s): S.G.^(GH) _ping! 21:00, 22 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because I feel it meets, or will certainly meet with a little fine-tuning from list experts here, the criteria for FL. The prose I believe will pass, the list is comprehensive, and with a little assistance from those in the know (similar to what happened at the FLC for List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by Fred Trueman) it should be deemed suitable. I've modelled the design on similar featured lists List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by Ian Botham and List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by James Anderson, neither of which I was involved with. S.G.^(GH) _ping! 21:00, 22 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

25 days and not a review! What a drought. Some notes:

Link "wicket" on first mention in article.

Done

Can you link 420 cricket to a specific article?

Sorry, how do you mean?

My mistake, I misread the statement. Seattle (talk) 17:31, 17 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

He made his Test debut in February 1997 February 1997 is an WP:EGG link.

That link points to the article on the Test series that he made his debut in. Is this okay?

Link "debut in" along with "February 1997" and that should be good. Seattle (talk) 17:31, 17 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done!

Link "runs"

Done

five-for until his 5/30 in July 2004 What does the notation "5/30" mean?

Five wickets at the cost of thirty runs, I'll explain it in the lead.

Number 17 has a typo "Drawm"

Fixed

Number 17 #Shakib Al Hasan perhaps a typo?

Fixed

"Key"– Result – The result for the Australian team in that match. New Zealand?

Fixed, that's me being an idiot.

He is yet to achieve would prefer "has not achieved" here.

Will do.

I would suggest reviewing other featured list candidates to try and get a few more sets of eyes over this list. Otherwise, the nomination will fail. Seattle (talk) 21:13, 16 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@Seattle: Thanks for your help, I've addressed your points. Could you please take a quick look at the two I've questions for? Cheers, --S.G.^(GH) _ping! 13:23, 17 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
You hyphenate five-wicket in the title, and that's what the cricket glossary article uses, but everywhere in the lead you say "five wicket". Please fix.
"thirty runs - 5/30 - in July" - should either be unspaced mdashes like "thirty runs—5/30—in July" or spaced ndashes like "thirty runs – 5/30 – in July", but certainly not hyphens. I prefer mdashes.
You do "Inn." and "Econ." with a period in the table, but not the index.
--Pres N 21:57, 30 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Believe I've caught all of these, thanks! S.G.^(GH) _ping! 14:28, 6 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"Of his five wicket hauls, 20 have come in Test cricket and two in ODI matches." → Of his five wicket hauls, Vittori has taken 20 in Test cricket and two in ODI matches.
"...seven wickets at the cost of 87 runs." → ...seven wickets for 87 runs.
"...he played his first match in March 1997." should be the first part of the sentence!
No need of "- 5/30 -", this is redundant.
- Hmmm, I was hoping that it helped explain what X/YY meant when it comes up later in the article. S.G.^(GH) _ping! 14:29, 6 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"...five wickets for the cost of only seven runs." → five wickets for seven runs.
Be consistent, use either numerals or words (i.e seven wickets at the cost of 87 runs, five wickets for thirty runs, etc.)
You have stated that "He has taken ten wickets across an entire Test match on three occasions." whereas the list shows only 2
- Ah yes, this is a mistake on my part. His 10 wicket haul in Wellington against SL was a 7-for and a 3-for, thus only appeared once on this list. I've fixed it. S.G.^(GH) _ping! 20:09, 6 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
The Wkts column doesn't sort properly for example 6 wickets for 28 runs should come earlier than 6 wickets for 70 runs and so on.

—Zia Khan 04:35, 5 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

- Unfortunately I'm not particularly skilled at tables, I'll ask Harrias so take a look again. S.G.^(GH) _ping! 20:09, 6 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from —Vensatry _(ping) (lede alone)

You could also mention his action in the opening sentence (off/leg right/left arm).
Link five-wicket haul in its first instance
"involves the taking of five or more wickets in a single innings" -> "involves a player taking five or more wickets in a single innings"
Why not abbreviate Twenty20 Internationals when it's used twice in the opening para itself?
Full stop missing after "two in ODI matches". The first para looks messed up and possibly needs a re-write.
No need to honorify Mr. Hadlee
Add England in the pipe "Test debut in February 1997". Borders WP:EASTEREGG
Link Sri Lanka
Phrases like "His best return with the ball" and "cost of only ..." aren't plain English. Rephrase them in simple words
"He did not take a five-for until his five wickets for 30 runs" This sentence reads like "He did not turn 18 until his eighteenth birthday". The sentence needs re-structuring.

—Vensatry _(ping) 17:20, 10 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Delegate's comment - This nomination has been archived. Nominators are asked to wait two weeks before nominating another list and address unresolved comments from this nomination during that wait. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:49, 19 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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