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Very good article just needs some fine tuning...somehow. Thefourdotelipsis 06:19, 18 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The fair use images require fair use rationales. Per WP:LEAD, it would be best to keep the lead at a maximum of 3 paragraphs. AndyZ 19:11, 18 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
There is also evidence of weasel words- “He is often considered one of the iconic villains of popular culture”. By whom is he considered such? AndyZ 19:14, 18 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- It's an observation based on a very reasonable and generally accepted opinion. You don't need a quote or a source for a statement like this. / Peter ^Isotalo 17:20, 24 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The article describes Vader too much though he was a real person. The amount of personal information should be reduced. The level of detail right now is very crufty / Peter ^Isotalo 17:20, 24 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The focus is all wrong. The article treats Vader as if he is a real person when he is, in fact, not. Please see User:Uncle G/Describe this universe and User:BrianSmithson/Writing about fiction for ideas on how to rewrite this article. — BrianSmithson 20:09, 27 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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	*The article describes Vader too much though he was a real person. The amount of personal information should be reduced. The level of detail right now is very crufty / [[User:Peter Isotalo\|Peter]] <sup>[[User talk:Peter Isotalo\|Isotalo]]</sup> 17:20, 24 March 2006 (UTC)		*The article describes Vader too much though he was a real person. The amount of personal information should be reduced. The level of detail right now is very crufty / [[User:Peter Isotalo\|Peter]] <sup>[[User talk:Peter Isotalo\|Isotalo]]</sup> 17:20, 24 March 2006 (UTC)

			*The focus is all wrong. The article treats Vader as if he is a real person when he is, in fact, not. Please see [[User:Uncle G/Describe this universe]] and [[User:BrianSmithson/Writing about fiction]] for ideas on how to rewrite this article. — [[User:BrianSmithson\|BrianSmithson]] 20:09, 27 March 2006 (UTC)