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Index of all requests for feedback

Founding Fathers

I just viewed the article "Founding Fathers" and note it includes within its definition a bunch of nonsense. The Founding Fathers were not every Tom, Dick, and Harry who lived in the USA in 1787, when the Constitutional Convention was held. The Founding Fathers are the fifty-five men who in secret drafted the founding document upon which the government of the United States of America was and is founded. The United States of America did not exist until 1788 when it was ratified by the states. There is only one Constitution for the nation which now exists as the United States of America and the men who wrote it are the Founding Fathers of the United States of America. Please, read Webster's Dictionary for the definition of Founding Fathers, with capital Fs.

The Declaration of Independence, for example, was a declaration of independence from King George, not the founding document of the United States of America.

Gene Garman —Preceding unsigned comment added by Gene Garman (talk • contribs) 05:40, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

I agree about capitalizing the Fs, but the declaration was in fact the precursor to the establishment of a nation (on paper, the constitution). Though many people do get these documents confused, for instance Jefferson states the 'all men are created equal' in the declaration, not in the Constitution (though it should have been) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Saberhr1 (talk • contribs) 06:23, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Definitions

This is with regards mostly to the science and mathematics related articles. If at all possible, if simpler definitions could be given for the more advanced terms, such as Planck's Constant, that would be greatly appriciated. See, I my current level of education is a High-School equivalent, but I very much enjoy studying the advanced conepts. This would help me to understand better. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 68.231.211.87 (talk) 05:10, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

You may wish to see if the Simple English Wikipedia has an easier article. Malinaccier (talk) 21:23, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Article on Thera Rising, Inc.

Hi there! My name's Ben and I'm the Marketing and Research Director for Thera Rising, Inc., a small St. Paul-based company. I'm looking at writing a Wikipedia article for the business, but I want to be very sure that I follow the posting criteria so that it doesn't come off looking like a marketing piece. Furthermore, this is my first Wikipedia article, so the formatting may not be perfect. It would really be great if I could get some feedback before I move the article over to live. You can see the draft that I saved to my user page here.

Thanks for your time! If you have any comments/criticisms/suggestions, please let me know!

(I think I got the signature to automatically link to my user page, but if not, here it is. Not that there's much there anyways.) —Preceding unsigned comment added by BenMMartin (talk • contribs) 17:24, 28 July 2009 (UTC)

So far you have no outside references. There are three citations, but all to your own company. You need to read wp:COI. Some editors may feel your position makes it impossible to directly contribute. The usual advice in the case of an existing article is to suggest that a contributor make suggestions and cite sources on the talk page, while letting other editors make the actual edits. That advice doesn't work in this case. I wish I could be more positive.--SPhilbrickT 02:06, 2 August 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Geographers_on_Film

I am working on creating this page for what can be an important academic resource for educators in the field of geographic thought, and though I have reliable references and resources, including professional publications and annals of the Association of American Geographers, I cannot figure out how/where to add them. As you will see, the editors are calling for citations and reliable sources. Can anyone offer advice to this Wiki novice? Thanks, Wes —Preceding unsigned comment added by Wesdow (talk • contribs) 02:49, 30 July 2009 (UTC)

I added the reflist, which is key to seeing the citations. Check out wp:cite. I find it very useful to use an option Citation tool, which you can add by going to your preferences, (see the link at the top of the page), go to Gadgets, and click "reftools". That will add a tab at the end of your editing buttons; click on it and enter the relevant fields and it will create a citation for you. Place the citation in the main article, when you save, the footnote number will appear in the article, and the citaiton itself will show below "Notes".--SPhilbrickT 02:22, 2 August 2009 (UTC)

International Foundation for Electoral Systems

I could really use some feedback at least on the quality of this article(please assess), or what I should do to improve it. Thank you much for your help, SADADS (talk) 13:56, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

Pennsylvania Renaissance Faire

We've put in a fair bit of work improving this article over the past week (compare to [1]), and are looking for suggestions for improvements. Does the article leave you with unanswered questions? In an ideal world, in which a suitable reference could be found for any fact, what else would you like to see in this article? On the other hand, do you see anything there that should be removed? Other suggestions? Also, the WikiProjects into which this article falls seem to be largely inactive, with the exception of WP:REENACT, for which I seem to be the only reviewer, so I'll ask here for opinions on how you think this article should be assessed, and what is needed to move it to the next level. Thanks, cmadler (talk) 17:37, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

RUNNERS IN SCORING POSITION

If the lead off batter hits a double but does not score in that inning because the next three batters strike out, is that scored as "zero for one" OR "zero for three" with runners in scoring position?

Bob —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bob Ebertz (talk • contribs) 19:50, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Mistake

On the list of best selling music artists it says Michael Jackson has sold 350 million, but that is a mistake he has in fact sold over 750 million, can you please correct this mistake. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Looshmj (talk • contribs) 11:36, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Kar-Ben Publishing

Kar-Ben Publishing, an award-winning children’s book publisher providing a growing Jewish library for children, is a division of Minneapolis-based Lerner Publishing Group.

The company had its genesis in 1975, when two friends, Judyth Groner and Madeline Wikler, founded Kar-Ben Copies, Inc. to publish My Very Own Haggadah, a children's Passover haggadah they had created. Now in its 30th anniversary printing, it went on to sell over two million copies. The company is named after the two founders’ youngest children, Madeline’s daughter Karen and Judye's son Ben. While "carbon copies" went the way of the rotary dial phone, Kar-Ben Copies became synonymous with quality Jewish books for children.

Over the next 27 years, under the leadership of the founders, Kar-Ben published more than 150 books for Jewish children and their families, the creative work of over 60 authors and illustrators. In recognition of their "outstanding contributions to the field of Jewish children’s literature," Judye and Madeline were awarded the prestigious "Body of Work Award" by the Sydney Taylor Book Award committee.

In 2001, Kar-Ben was purchased by Lerner Publishing Group. Under the leadership of publisher Joni Sussman, Kar-Ben Publishing now publishes over sixteen new titles of Jewish content each year, for children from pre-school through middle school, both fiction and non-fiction. Kar-Ben has created many award-winning children's books on such subjects as Jewish holidays, crafts, folktales, and contemporary stories and picture books. Many have become popular classics including The Mouse in the Matzah Factory, Once Upon a Shabbos, the Sammy Spider series, and the best-selling book Six Million Paper Clips.

References

15:28, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Webco Industries is a manufacturer and supplier of specialty tubing and pressure tubing products. Webco provides carbon steel, stainless steel, alloy steel tube, nickel alloy, non-ferrous and specialty alloy tube and pipe products. They offer an extensive array of value-added services, and product development and engineering assistance. Webco produces and distributes a variety of stainless steel, duplex, nickel alloy, and other specialty grades of tubing and pipe. A full-service manufacturer and distributor of high-quality heat exchanger tubing, Webco has one of the largest inventories available 24 hours a day, seven days a week, and has a unique blend of manufacturing and distribution capabilities. Webco will discuss specific requirements with each customer and is able to meet critical lead times. They offer all testing and value-added services to the heat exchanger tubing specifications. Webco‘s manufacturing capabilities for carbon steel and stainless steel provide a strategic advantage over its competing distributors. The company also believes that its distribution capabilities provide a strategic advantage over its mill competitors. To help foster continuous improvements in quality and customer service, Webco adheres to a total quality management system based upon ISO 9002 quality system standards. As one of the nation's fastest growing mechanical tubing manufacturers of As-Welded, Seamless and DOM material, Webco can offer quality service and consistency. Their experienced technical staff is available to assist with specialized end-use applications. With manufacturing plants strategically located in Oklahoma and Pennsylvania, Webco can cater to JIT or vendor-managed inventories. ERW, DOM, Seamless, or SSID are all produced on a regular basis for an array of different customers, from automotive to appliance industries, and Webco offers the heaviest direct welded "wall-to-diameter" ratio in the industry. Webco has a commitment to excellence in the steel-manufacturing industry. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Whiteurst-Felton (talk • contribs) 15:30, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Webco Industries is a manufacturer and supplier of specialty tubing and pressure tubing products. Webco provides carbon steel, stainless steel, alloy steel tube, nickel alloy, non-ferrous and specialty alloy tube and pipe products. They offer an extensive array of value-added services, and product development and engineering assistance. Webco produces and distributes a variety of stainless steel, duplex, nickel alloy, and other specialty grades of tubing and pipe. A full-service manufacturer and distributor of high-quality heat exchanger tubing, Webco has one of the largest inventories available 24 hours a day, seven days a week, and has a unique blend of manufacturing and distribution capabilities. Webco will discuss specific requirements with each customer and is able to meet critical lead times. They offer all testing and value-added services to the heat exchanger tubing specifications. Webco‘s manufacturing capabilities for carbon steel and stainless steel provide a strategic advantage over its competing distributors. The company also believes that its distribution capabilities provide a strategic advantage over its mill competitors. To help foster continuous improvements in quality and customer service, Webco adheres to a total quality management system based upon ISO 9002 quality system standards. As one of the nation's fastest growing mechanical tubing manufacturers of As-Welded, Seamless and DOM material, Webco can offer quality service and consistency. Their experienced technical staff is available to assist with specialized end-use applications. With manufacturing plants strategically located in Oklahoma and Pennsylvania, Webco can cater to JIT or vendor-managed inventories. ERW, DOM, Seamless, or SSID are all produced on a regular basis for an array of different customers, from automotive to appliance industries, and Webco offers the heaviest direct welded "wall-to-diameter" ratio in the industry. Webco has a commitment to meet or exceed expectations. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Whiteurst-Felton (talk • contribs) 15:53, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gerda_Arendt

This is Gerda Arendt, new contributor from Germany and slightly overwhelmed by the amount of reading required before starting an article successfully. My intention (August 2) was to supply more information on composer and cellist Graham Waterhouse, who is on the "list of 21st century classical composers by name", than just his year of birth. I thought that once you are on a list like that you are notable ... The article was deleted before I even could mark it "hang on".

I improved the article in my user space and would like to discuss it.

Questions: Graham Waterhouse is born in England but lives in Germany, I would not know in which category to place him.

There is no general category "cellist" - redirected to "cello".

Which category would show "21st century classical composer"? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:58, 10 August 2009 (UTC)