Talk:Bombus hypnorum

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Peer Review

This article on the Bombus hypnorum bee is good overall. I fixed some grammar points in the Overview and Habitat sections. I suggest adding a fun fact about the bee in the Overview. I also noticed that the B. hypnorum was not italicized in most places, so I tried to correct those throughout the article. In terms of expanding the Wikipedia page, I suggest researching and adding more information to the sections of Taxonomy and Phylogeny and a few sections under the heading Interactions as these sections only have about one sentence in them currently. I think that the article explains the mating behavior, habitats, and distribution of the bee very well. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rasikareddy1019 (talk • contribs) 21:56, 29 September 2015 (UTC)

This article has a lot of promise. I have corrected the rest of the unitalisized B. hypnorum, and I have restructured some sentences throughout the piece. I have also added hyperlinks to as many of the plants and insects as I could find. As the above comment says, the biggest suggestion that I would make would be to add more to each section. Ten sections (including the overview) have three senetences or less. Also, the Worker-Worker Conflict section doesn't make sense. " this bee would eat the eats of any other workers that were laying eggs..." I assume that the "eats" should be eggs, but I couldn't access the source; thus, I didn't make the change. The Olfactory Senses section doesn't explain what the responses are, how the chemicals are sensed, and why the queen has the highest response. As the section is now, I think it should be deleted. Finally, the Humans section needs to be cited. The Description, Distribution, and Habitat sections are well conceived. The rest of the topics just need to be expanded. Floyd Burney (talk) 18:39, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

This article includes a variety of information that provides the reader with a breath of information about Bombus hypnorum. This article requires a map distribution in order to be complete on the right hand side. I mostly added hyperlinks and italicized necessary words throughout the article. The overview section is a bit brief. I recommend adding a few summaries of this bees’ basic morphology, habitat and behavior. For example, since this bee is a tree bumblebee, one could briefly explain this habitat in the overview. Speaking of habitat, it would be fascinating to me as a reader to learn about the evolutionary advantage of this habitat form in the habitat section. Readers would enjoy greater detail in the Taxonomy and Phylogeny section, such as the meaning of the genus and species, plus its relevance to the bee’s characteristics. Claims are well referenced. The behavior section includes importing mating information, but could use more information on foraging and communication behavior. All in al, this article has immense potential to be considered a good article.Orchidabar (talk) 03:24, 2 October 2015 (UTC)