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Tikal the Echidna

This article is quite stable (except for one time) and has references, notes, and sources. It has pictures, and it has enough information about the subject. Is there anything else wrong with this article? I feel like something might be unencylopedic around the Fleetway and Archie section, though, but I'm not sure. So is there anything wrong with it? --71.104.187.145 20:24, 23 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I noticed that this request was misplaced and not on this requests page, so I put it here for them. -- RattleMan 23:18, 23 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Some suggestions:

Increase the lead to reach WP:LEAD- WP:WIAFA stresses that the lead should be a brief overview of the article

I dislike naming the first section "History", since it is a fictional character- perhaps life or storyline or something alone those lines?

Both weaknesses and abilities should be converted to prose from lists

References and External links are by definition opposites. If they were used as references, the section should be references; if they weren't, the section should be external links.

Thanks, AndyZ _t 23:55, 23 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Rattleman, for moving the peer review to the right place, and thanks for those tips, AndyZ! And now I'll fix the history section up, merge the weaknesses and abilities together, and take away the word, "External links". And, I'll try to have an overview of the article. --71.104.187.145 03:11, 24 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Everything's fixed up! --71.104.187.145 04:03, 24 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Any other advice? --71.104.185.157 04:41, 25 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

There are several very short paragraphs, this is frowned upon, as are links in section titles.
Tikal is sometimes shown with a green-bordered light brown cloth attached to her skirt. This is unclear. When is she so shown? From the second pic, it'll look like it is so in character art.
The trivia section should ideally be worked into the article itself. If it's "trivia", then it is by defiinition not encyclopedic.
Better references could be useful. Out of six notes, three are in the aformentionned trivia section!
However, the image after the Super Sonic story credits might suggest she went to the past Angel Island. This is speculation.
The article seems oddly lacking in Wiki links, especially to other characters...
The images copyright tags are completely inappropriate. Circeus 20:37, 25 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I'll try to fix those up then. Thanks for the advice! --71.104.181.162 00:29, 26 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Anything else wrong with the article? --71.104.181.162 01:08, 26 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

BTW, I think I fixed the problems mentioned above! :) So is there any other advice? --71.105.4.113 19:19, 7 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]