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Pinus Rubinstein

Hi Pinus Rubinstein's books "Judische Vatikan in Sadagora" appear in worldcat, (http://www.worldcat.org/search?q=ti%3Ajudische+vatikan+sadagora&qt=results_page), held by many major libraries worldwide. In these books he gives unique historical information about Jewish Sadagora and Czernowitz, and about life in WWII under Russian and Nazi rule. These books were also translated to English and is available online on the most important Jewish Genealogy website Jewishgen, becuase of its importance. I think that sheding light on the writer of these books and his life is of general interest to many readers and scholars of Judaica, Holocaust and WWII, and this is why I wrote about him. All the best Eran — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eranreiss (talk • contribs) 08:52, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It is certainly important! I'm just trying to make sure he passes notability guidelines. I'll contact a few experienced editors in the topic and see what they can do. Thank you for your patience, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:59, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I looked at your article. I think you will have a hard time proving Rubinstein's notability - I couldn't find a single reference to him online. But, more important, because of your article I read his books and found them delightful! My father-in-law told us how, as a child, his mother took him to the Sadagora Reb for blessing. Rubinstein's book made all that come alive. So, whatever happens to the article, thanks for pointing me there. --Ravpapa (talk) 07:01, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for sharing that! It would certainly be a shame to miss such an article on technical notability grounds...Do you know of anyone who could help? FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 13:07, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Notability is not a technical issue. If we were to write about everyone who wrote a book like this, there would be no end to it. I'm afraid that Rubinstein is not going to make it.

But I have a different suggestion. Why don't you add a paragraph to the article on Sadhora, mentioning that Rubinstein wrote a book of memoirs, and that there is an organization of Israelis from Sadhora that published it? The truth is, a lot more people will see the reference there than will see the article on Rubinstein in Wikipedia. --Ravpapa (talk) 15:57, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll try to communicate that to the submitter, and I'll probably end up being bold and doing it myself. PS: I quite enjoyed your Tilt essay! Best, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 16:07, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

USPD

I think you missed that Draft:Division of Program Coordination, Planning, and Strategic Initiatives was copied from a work of the US Government, and therefore in the public domain. It does have to be stated explicitly of course. It also has to be rewritten from its present form of a press release. I'll advise the author. DGG ( talk ) 05:03, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

You're right! How silly of me! Thanks for noticing. Cheers, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 13:05, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

AFC: InfoBeans

Thank you for your comment, however I could not understand what do you mean by "Could scrape general notability...". Do you mean I do Web Scraping to get more data/content for this article? or Do you mean I remove some content/data from the article. I also read the general notability guideline on Wikipedia here - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Notability#General_notability_guideline; but could not understand what to do next. I believe it adheres to general notability guideline.

Please elaborate so I can implement suggestions made by you. Thanks, Avinash VirtualAvi (talk) 06:59, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

What I meant by stating that guideline was that it might barely pass notability, but there is no overwhelming coverage, so to speak. Nonetheless, the article needs extensive trimming, due to its neutrality problems (see language, for instance), excessive subsections, puffery and irrelevant information. After that, we can get a second opinion. Thanks! FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:41, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comment on Angel Broking

Hi,

Thanks for your comment. I have added few reference links for the products. Kindly take a look again and let me know if they are fine. Also, I have added references for awards and milestones which I felt are notable. Kindly provide your guidance on the changes to be done to improve the article.

Regards,

--Muab2 (talk) 11:12, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'd advise you to write the renamed "History" section as prose, and avoid non-neutral language. I've also restructured the products section according to Wikipedia standards. Let's see if we can turn this into a decent article. Thanks, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:47, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi,

Thanks for your feedback and help with the article. I have made the necessary changes. Do take a look and let me know how I can improvise the article further.

Regards, --Muab2 (talk) 09:44, 8 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

5nine Software article draft

Hi FoCuSandLeArN, I wanted to thank you for your review and feedback regarding the 5nine Software article. I updated the draft with a few credible sources (TechTarget's SearchWindowsServer and SearchServerVirtualization, and InfoWorld). Thanks again! Amelet (talk) 10:22, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Soraya Syed page

Hi, yes please, I desperately need help with the Soraya Syed page! Please let me know when is good for you. Thank you! Remona — Preceding unsigned comment added by Remonaaly (talk • contribs) 16:07, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I passed on the submission to other reviewers for a second opinion. Let's wait a few days and see what happens. In the meantime, try cleaning the article up a bit, such as with the removal of external in-line links and with the removal of unreferenced information. Happy editing! FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 16:34, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Somen

Thank you for advice. I cleaned the itinerary section on Somen Debnath's page, leaving only the regions (continents). — Preceding unsigned comment added by AngeliMarines (talk • contribs) 19:12, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

(talk page stalker) What you did is an improvement, but it still needs more cleanup. I think a lot of the problems would be solved by entirely removing the "Media about Somen Debnath" section. It is redundant to "Itinerary" section, is poorly formatted, and all the youtube references make it look spammy. I hope that helps. 78.26 _{(spin me / revolutions)} 19:18, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Dear reviewer, thank you for advice. I deleted all Media About Somen Debnath. I know you are very busy, but could you kindly please check if this works now or tell me what else to do? With kindest regards, Angelica — Preceding unsigned comment added by AngeliMarines (talk • contribs) 19:38, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that. It looks better. It still needs a better selection of references (for example here) from independent and reliable sources. When that's done, I'll perform a quick cleanup and accept it if everything looks good.

Best, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 20:18, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Response to your comment on Draft:Aina More.

Thank you for your comment.

In response to your comment: Does she have any singles in charts? FoCuSandLeArN on Draft: Aina More

No, Aina More does not currently have any Singles in the Charts.

Kind Regards,

Roxanne — Preceding unsigned comment added by RoxanneUshedo (talk • contribs) 21:22, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

International Human Rights Law Course

Thanks for taking an interest in my human rights course. The "add yourself as reviewer" option was originally intended for students to add themselves and review each other's pages. My class was however larger than expected this year, and so we have ended up not using this feature. From an assessment point of view, the students have now submitted their assignments, and I am about to mark them. So, I am happy for you to use the "add yourself as a reviewer" feature, or alternatively just comment/edit some of the articles. You will have already seen that the student contributions are quite a mixed bunch, with some excellent contributions and others less so. Some gentle suggestions for improvement would be welcome. Thanks. Humanrights4nz (talk) 21:47, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for such a prompt response! I'll be more than glad to give them some feedback and review some articles. I'll do so first thing tomorrow. Thanks again, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 21:50, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]