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Shakespeare authorship question
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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been almost totally rewritten from a neutral POV using scholarly reliable sources only. In the past it has been a very contentious page and a POV battleground, and I want to try to take it to FA status, which I think would help stabilise it to keep its neutral POV.
Thanks, Tom Reedy (talk) 04:11, 6 December 2010 (UTC)
- I'll simply list anything which might be commented at at FAC or by MOS sticklers.
- Lead looks good and seems to comply with rules; however, the many footnotes might raise objections. On the other hand, this being a controversial subject, it is probably a good idea to present much of the case at the start.
- I am not sure about having book titles as external links in the article text. I always thought this was prohibited, but my look at WP:MOSLINK#Link titles proved inconclusive.
- Picture size should as a rule be at free scale. There is the possibility of the upright parameter, which reduces the free size automatically without a fixed value. Lead image is at 200px now, while the default was changed to 220px a while ago. Some of the smaller ones could perhaps use the upright instead of the very small pixel values?
- Very short paragraphs, especially one- or two-sentence paragraphs like the first in Unearthing proofs are discouraged. Quite a number might perhaps be combined, as in "Television, magazines, and the Internet", or the first two in Oxford (just examples).
- Shakespeare on trial, part 1: That the SAQ "has often been tested by recourse to the framework of trial by jury", shouldn't that rather say "mock trial", so it's clearer that these were unofficial show or fun events? The participation of real judges does not make them in any way official, or does it?
- Bacon: a)"The great number of legal allusions used by Shakespeare demonstrate his expertise in the law,"; wouldn't it be better to write "The great number of legal allusions used by Shakespeare demonstrate, Baconians say, his expertise in the law," or did S. really use expertise? b)The impression is first that Delia Bacon introduced Bacon, but then it says that Smith wrote a book in 1856 which did that; a bit confusing.
- Oxford section: a)Regarding the never/ever/every code, does "This veiled signature in the works of Marlowe, George Gascoigne, Sir John Harrington, Edmund Spenser" mean that Oxford wrote the works of these people as well? Or is it that he sometimes used their name, and they were still writing things themselves? b)"The publisher's dedication to Shakespeare's Sonnets", is that perhaps in S. Sonnets?
- Marlove: I think it would be good to explain briefly that Thomas Walsingham is some cousin of Francis Walsingham, lest people think the spymaster is meant (as I thought).
- Terry Ross ref should have some sort of publisher and a retrieval date if web-based.
- I think the article is especilly engaging in the earlier-middle parts and easy to understand for the non-specialist reader, although it gets a bit harder in the later part, especially in Bacon; but that's presumably because of the weird theories. Buchraeumer (talk) 22:06, 10 December 2010 (UTC)
I saw the question about the book title/external links on a different talk page. My inclination is to turn these into references. As many of them point to easily accessible source material via Google Books, I would be loathe to remove them. --GentlemanGhost (talk) 00:04, 11 December 2010 (UTC)
Comments from Nikkimaria
- Lead is appropriately broad in scope, but reads as long-winded because of the consistently long sentence length. Consider splitting a few sentences to increase accessibility
- Don't use contractions
- "Anti-Stratfordians often portray the town as an illiterate cultural backwater...and from the earliest days have often depicted him as greedy, stupid, and illiterate" - can the repetition of "illiterate" be avoided?
- "save for two signatures by Susanna that appear to be "drawn" and not written" - could you briefly clarify this distinction?
- "Of those 15 play editions, 13 are on the title pages of just three plays" - potentially confusing wording
- "The mainstream view, to which nearly all academic Shakespeareans subscribe, is that the author referred to as "Shakespeare" was the same William Shakespeare who was born in Stratford-upon-Avon in 1564, travelled to London and became an actor and sharer (part-owner) of the Lord Chamberlain's Men (later the King's Men) acting company that owned the Globe Theatre, the Blackfriars Theatre, and exclusive rights to produce Shakespeare's plays from 1594 to 1642,[58] and who was allowed the use of the honorific "gentleman" after 1596 when his father, John Shakespeare, was granted a coat of arms, and who died in Stratford-upon-Avon in 1616."; "In contrast to the methods used by anti-Stratfordians, Shakespeare scholars employ the same methodology to attribute works to the poet and playwright William Shakespeare as they use for other writers of the period: the historical record[59] and stylistic studies, and maintain that the methods used by many anti-Stratfordians to identify alternative candidates—such as reading the work as autobiography, finding coded messages and cryptograms embedded in the works, and concocting conspiracy theories to explain the lack of evidence for any writer but Shakespeare—are unreliable, unscholarly, and explain why more than 70 candidates[60] have been nominated as the "true" author" - examples of very long sentences
- You note that you intend to use the term "Stratfordian" for those who believe Shakespeare to have been the true author of the plays, yet that term appears only twice in the text, and is vastly outweighed by "Shakespearean" or synonyms. Could you clarify your position on this point?
- You repeat a couple of points a few times, including the coat-of-arms and "This Star of England"
- I echo the above commenter's point about one-sentence paragraphs
- Why are quotations italicized in "Personal testimonies"?
- "Prominent English actor, playwright, and author Thomas Heywood." - not a complete sentence
- "proved 16 May 1605" - is "proved" a legal term in this context? Could you explain or link it?
- Philips or Phillips?
- "William Shakespeare of Stratford-upon-Avon’s will, executed 25 March 1616, bequeaths "to my ffellowes John Hemynge Richard Burbage & Henry Cundell xxvj s viij d A peece to buy them Ringes."...Shakespeare's will also includes monetary bequests to buy mourning rings for his fellow actors and theatrical entrepreneurs Heminges, Burbage and Condell" - why is this "also"? Aren't they the same thing?
- "The Latin curriculum began with William Lily’s Latin grammar Rudimenta Grammatices, which was by law the sole Latin grammar to be used in grammar schools" - repetitive
- "based on a quantitative comparison of Shakespeare’s stylistic habits (known as stylometrics) using computer programs to compare them to the works" - grammar
- "The emergence of the Shakespeare authorship question had to wait until he was regarded as the English national poet in a class by himself" - tone seems a bit off here
- "touching up" - meaning editing?
- Be consistent in MoS details, for example in the use of U. S. vs U.S.
- Link terms on first appearance only, and don't link very common terms like United States. However, less common terms should be linked where possible
- "Stewart monarchies" - the generally accepted spelling is "Stuart"
- "De Vere was recognised as a playwright, one of the "best for comedy amongst us", by Francis Meres, as well as an important courtier poet" - meaning is unclear. Do you mean he was recognized as a playwright by Meres and an important courtier poet, or do you mean that Meres recognized him as a playwright and important courtier poet?
- "but was promoted to that of a single author in 1895" - what does the "that" refer to?
- Be consistent in referring to the Earl of Derby as either Stanley or Derby, as mixing the two is somewhat confusing
- "The evidence instead supports a career..." - source?
- "He praises Shakespeare as a person, writing "I lov'd the man, and doe honour his memory (on this side Idolatry) as much as any. Hee was (indeed) honest, and of an open, and free nature: had an excellent Phantsie, brave notions, and gentle expressions . . . . hee redeemed his vices, with his vertues. There was ever more in him to be praysed, then to be pardoned."" - source?
- "Anti-Stratfordians often try to cast suspicion on the bequests, which were interlined, saying that they were added later as part of the conspiracy, but the will was proved in the Prerogative Court of the Archbishop of Canterbury in London on 22 June 1616, and the original will was copied into the court register with the interlineations intact." - source?
- "Shakespeare's are the most-studied secular works in history" - source?
- "Baconian cryptogram-hunting flourished well into the 20th century, and in 1905 Walt Whitman biographer Dr. Isaac Hull Platt discovered that the Latin word honorificabilitudinitatibus, found in Love's Labour's Lost, is an anagram of Hi ludi F. Baconis nati tuiti orbi ("These plays, the offspring of F. Bacon, are preserved for the world.")." - source?
- Missing bibliographic details for Matus 1991, Montegue 1963, MCrea 2005 (might be a spelling problem), Johnson 1969, Potts 2002
- Footnote 72: date?
- Dawson 1966, Dobson 2001, Vickers 2006 and Elliott 2004 should be cited using both authors
- Brooks 1943, Kathman and Ross, Kathman (2), Lefranc 1919a, Looney 1920, May 1980, Symposium 2004, Wells 2006 are in Bibliography but not Footnotes
- Need a consistent method to distinguish between sources with same author and date
- Pendleton: formatting
- Non-print-based weblinks need publisher and retrieval date
- Compare formatting of two Dobson references
- Why are page titles bolded in External links
- Change subheading from "Mainstream" to "Shakespearean" or "Stratfordian"
- What are the sources for the images used in the lead collage? Those will likely be required at FAC (even if the images in question appear later in the article, the lead collage description page should still specify them)
- File:Sonnets1609titlepage.jpg needs more information on the source (and check spelling)
- Check licensing for File:Shakespeare-1747-1656.jpg - the monument is a 3D work and is subject to slightly different licensing rules. I'm not sure whether the plaque would also be considered 3D, so check on that also
- File:Shakespear_ye_Player_coatofarms.gif - author name doesn't match that given in the source
- File:Christopher_Marlowe.jpg - source link is dead
- File:6thEarlOfDerby.jpg - tagged as lacking author information. Nikkimaria (talk) 21:48, 13 December 2010 (UTC)
Comments from NinaGreen
The Wikipedia policy of neutrality is not maintained in the SAQ article.
Okay, this isn't really the place for this discussion - please see below
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David Kathman has a degree in linguistics, works as a stock analyst, and has openly proselytized for more than a decade on the authorship controversy (see http://shakespeareauthorship.com/kathman.html). Kathman is anything but neutral on the SAQ. Yet on the sole authority of an outdated 2003 statement by Kathman, the SAQ article inaccurately labels the SAQ as a 'fringe theory'. Evidence that the SAQ is a minority view rather than a fringe theory is found in a 2007 New York Times survey. 17% of Shakespeare professors surveyed by the New York Times thought that there was either "good reason," or "possibly good reason," for doubt about the authorship of the Shakespeare canon, and 72% of professors said they address the authorship question in their classes. This constitutes evidence directly from academics teaching Shakespeare at universities that the SAQ is a minority view, not a fringe theory. See the survey at http://www.nytimes.com/2007/04/22/education/shakespeare.html?_r=1. Moreover a graduate program in Shakespeare authorship studies is offered at Brunel University in England, and a program in Shakespeare authorship studies is offered at Concordia University in the United States. Two recent books by respected academics devoted to the authorship controversy, James Shapiro's Contested Will and Scott McCrae's The Case for Shakespeare, constitute further evidence that the SAQ is a minority view, not a fringe theory. Leading Shakespeare actors, including Mark Rylance and Sir Derek Jacobi, are openly sceptical of Shakespeare of Stratford's authorship of the plays (see http://www.telegraph.co.uk/culture/theatre/8196501/Sir-Derek-Jacobi-Bard-to-the-bone.html). A feature film on the authorship controversy, directed by Roland Emmerich, will be released next year. In anticipation of the film's release, Dr. Hardy Cook asked on his well known Shaksper list for suggestions for strategies which academics could use to deal with questions raised about the authorship of Shakespeare's works when the film is released, indicating clearly that the authorship controversy is much more than a 'fringe theory'. There are peer-reviewed journals on the authorship controversy, such as Brief Chronicles (see http://www.briefchronicles.com/ojs/index.php/bc/index.php), whose editorial boards are comprised of individuals with Ph.D.s who teach at universities in the United States and Great Britain. In its present state the SAQ article does not meet Wikipedia standards of neutrality, and does not reflect the current status of the authorship controversy, but rather reflects a point of view which is at best outdated and at worst biased, based solely on David Kathman's 2003 statement. For Tom Reedy's association with David Kathman in proselytizing on the authorship controversy, see http://shakespeareauthorship.com/howdowe.html.NinaGreen (talk) 05:38, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
The SAQ article lacks balance and is heavily weighted to the Stratfordian side. The language used, such as that non-Stratfordians "claim" and "assert" rather than "state" displays a strong Stratfordian bias and lack of neutrality. As Nina Green has demonstrated above, there is a wealth of evidence demonstrating that non-Stratfordians do not subscribe to a fringe theory, but are simply members of an acceptable minority group.Mizelmouse (talk) 12:48, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
Nina this is not the appropriate venue to make you argument that the SAQ is not a fringe theory or to demonstrate your WP:OR. That place is WP:FRINGE/N. Tom Reedy (talk) 15:32, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
Further bias in the SAQ article is found in the Stylometric Studies section, which reads:
No mention is made in the SAQ article of the fact that the flaws in Elliott and Valenza's methodology have been explicated in several articles by Richard Whalen and John Shahan.NinaGreen (talk) 16:11, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
My experience is that it is a waste of time to deal with your assertions on a case-by-case basis, so I will simply wait until the article becomes an FA candidate and respond to your objections there. Meanwhile I suggest you consult the actual references given in the article instead of substituting your own page numbers. Tom Reedy (talk) 17:02, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
Another example of deliberate bias in the SAQ article is found in this statement:
Shapiro is cited as a source (Shapiro 2010, pp. 221–2 (194–6)). However Shapiro names only a single example:
The bias and lack of neutrality in the SAQ article is obvious. Where Shapiro cites only a single obscure individual (who IS George Frisbee, anyway?), the SAQ article tars every Oxfordian with the same brush. The SAQ article is seriously flawed. Not only is it out of date on a number of major issues, but it is also written throughout from a biased point of view which is far from Wikipedia's standards of neutrality, as the foregoing examples demonstrate (and many more can be cited).NinaGreen (talk) 17:23, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
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This isn't really the best place for you to raise these types of issues. Possible avenues: WP:FRINGE/N, WP:RFC, WP:NPOV/N...take your pick, or discuss at article talk. Nikkimaria (talk) 18:44, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
- Wait a minute. Tom Reedy's claim is that the article is written throughout from a neutral point of view, and of course Wikipedia's policy demands neutrality. I've documented on this page numerous instances of clear bias in the article. In addition I've demonstrated that the article is seriously outdated on significant issues. It needs a complete overhaul in both respects. It's certainly not a candidate for FA status at this point. Moreover Wikipedia policy is as follows:
- Academic consensus
- The statement that all or most scientists or scholars hold a certain view requires reliable sourcing that directly says that all or most scientists or scholars hold that view. Otherwise, individual opinions should be identified as those of particular, named sources. Editors should avoid original research especially with regard to making blanket statements based on novel syntheses of disparate material. Stated simply, any statement in Wikipedia that academic consensus exists on a topic must be sourced rather than being based on the opinion or assessment of editors.
- There are statements throughout the article, including the statement in the lede, regarding academic consensus which are unsupported.
At the moment, we are trying to improve the article. SAQ is not a current candidate for Featured Article status - WP:PR is to improve the article, not promote it. In any event, you've made your views clear here, but you would be better off pursuing one of the forms of dispute resolution I mentioned above. Continuing to post here is unlikely to be helpful. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:28, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
- Nina's presence here could not be more helpful.If you believe otherwise,Nikkimaria it is,charitably, due to the fact that you have not read,nor possibly even viewed
the source materials cited in the article.
- Take the above references to the "book" which preceded the publication of Delia Bacon by one year.It is actually a circa thirty-two page pamphlet by William Henry Smith.Moreover Delia Bacon who never claimed that Francis Bacon was more than a subsidiary contributor to the Shakespeare canon was quite recently re-edited and is readilly available.But is not cited.
- You have swallowed hook,line and sinker Reedy's frequent undocumented (and radical) pieces of historical revisionism.Notably a statement(cited by you above)equating alleged " anti-Stratfordian" autobiographical studies with alleged Baconian cryptograms.In fact autobiographical interpretation was the standard ("mainstream" as used here is wastebasket terminology) from the publication of Dowden's "Life of Shakespeare in the 1870's to Peter Ackroyd ,and Nichol's much praised "The Lodger". In fact Ackroyd and Nichol argue that the plays could only have been written by a man "redolent of the brothel"and therefore William of Stratford is the only possible author.
- Take the above references to the "book" which preceded the publication of Delia Bacon by one year.It is actually a circa thirty-two page pamphlet by William Henry Smith.Moreover Delia Bacon who never claimed that Francis Bacon was more than a subsidiary contributor to the Shakespeare canon was quite recently re-edited and is readilly available.But is not cited.
::: As for Reedy's even more tendentious claim that there are 70 anti-Stratfordian theories all deriving from autobiographical theories,he cites only a ten page magazine article written earlier in the present year.I have taken the liberty of writing to the author in question but it is too early to anticipate a reply.but Unless he can reproduce an earlier citation these (and all similar) references should be deleted ::: The standard Bibliotheca Anti-Stratfordiana compiled in in the late 1940's is available on microfilm at Columbia University(and where I spent three years checking it out in the 1960"s. A published authorship bibliography also appeared in the late 70's under university auspices.It is astonishing that neither of these two most primary working sources has ever been cited here. ::: Moreover,Harold Shapiro does not seem to have taken the trouble to have walked some two thousand feet from his office to consult it(at least to any effect) and the reliability of his work per se suffers accordingly As this article is cluttered with similar sins of omission and commission,the simplest solution would require a minimum addition and deletion of perhaps fifty small items involving at least a dozen titles and footnotes and perhaps thirty-five alterations or deletions.The alternative,for example, would to expand the article to even more confusing length by explaining how the anti-biographical prejudice crept in as the result of growing Marxist and radical feminist elements in certain English departments which have a great deal with what happened in Maoist China in the 50's and what happened at Columbia and Berkeley,California, in the late 60's but which have nothing whatsoever to do with what did, or did not, happen in Elizabethan London.Charles Darnay (talk) 22:54, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the clarification. I'm not interested in dispute resolution. I'm trying to improve the article, which you've stated is what this page is for. I've made some very specific suggestions for improving certain sections of the article which are biased, inaccurate, or outdated. What happens next? How do my suggestions become implemented?NinaGreen (talk) 20:24, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
- Well, as the editor who opened this peer review (Tom) does not seem to agree with your suggestions, I suggest you create an RfC on the article talk page or post to a noticeboard to gain broader consensus about whether such changes should be implemented and, if so, how this should be done. Nikkimaria (talk) 21:13, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the clarification. I'm not interested in dispute resolution. I'm trying to improve the article, which you've stated is what this page is for. I've made some very specific suggestions for improving certain sections of the article which are biased, inaccurate, or outdated. What happens next? How do my suggestions become implemented?NinaGreen (talk) 20:24, 15 December 2010 (UTC)