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I will review this article over the next few days. Cheers, « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 04:33, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
" their last match on 12 April 2018." - there last of the season? Not their last ever. Please clarify.
"During the second half of the season Jamshedpur managed to gain five victories but a draw and three defeats," - split into two sentences, "During the second half of the season Jamshedpur managed to gain five victories. However, a draw and three defeats..."
" played at least 1 match," - change 1 to "one" « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 22:08, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Background
"Coppell, the previous ISL season, had led the Kerala Blasters to the league final." - rewrite to "Coppell led the Kerala Blasters to the league final during the previous ISL season."
"Construction on the team for the first season" - replace "on" with "of"
"They also had first pick for the first two rounds" - add "the" after "had"
"by Jamshedpur and thus became the first player in Jamshedpur history." - reword to "by Jamshedpur, thus becoming the first player in Jamshedpur history."
"played in the ISL in past seasons such as" - reword to "played in the ISL in past seasons, including"
Please use the {{Abbr}} template for the various positions in the tables (GK, DF, MF, FW, etc). « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 21:27, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Pre-season
This should include some text. Something that summarizes their pre-season.
In the match report tables, why don't you include all of the goals scored. You seem to only include the goals scored by Jamshedpur. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 21:27, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Indian Super League
It is weird that the whole first paragraph is written in the present tense, even though the season is over. I would recommend converting it all to past tense.
"for three matches wasn't a problem and that he" - per WP:CONTRACTION, I would change "wasn't" into "was not"
"consecutive cleansheets to start the season." - "clean sheets" needs a space
"the other new entrants of the Indian Super League" - "entrant" should be singular
"The match was billed to be one between the league's best attack (Goa) and the league's best defense (Jamshedpur)." - recommend changing to "was billed to be a showdown between the..." or something similar.
"Brandon Fernandes was brought down in the box by André Bikey and Manuel Lanzarote converted the penalty a second time after the first one, which he also scored, was disallowed." - recommend splitting into two sentences and shortening the second part: "down in the box by Andre Bikey. Manuel converted the penalty after his first attempt was disallowed."
"The game started in the best way possible for Jamshedpur with Jerry Mawihmingthanga scoring just 22 seconds into the match, the fastest goal scored in Indian Super League history." - "the best way" seems like WP:WEASEL words. I would just replace with "positively" or something more neutral.
"The match started out in the worst way for" - same comment as above. Just replace with something more neutral.
"take the lead 2–1 by the 66th minute a take the three points" - reword to "take the lead 2–1 in the 66th minute to take the three points."
"Despite Coppell's men taking the during the first half through Wellington Priori," - there is a missing word.
"The new home didn't help for Jamshedpur" - "didn't" to "did not"
"Unfortunately, the match did not go at all the way Jamshedpur would have wanted." - not a neutral POV. Reword to something like "However, the match did not go the way Jamshedpur would have wanted."
"a single appearance till that point," - change "till" to "until"
In the final table, why not include the first and second place teams? Or even the full table?
Since these results will never change, you can remove the "Last updated: 6 March 2018."
"The Super Cup is a knockout football competition in India. The 2018 edition was the first ever tournament." - you should combine these sentences. Something like "The Super Cup is a knockout football competition in India that was inaugurated in 2018."
"As Jamshedpur finished in fifth place during the 2017–18 ISL season, the club entered the main competition directly which was be hosted at the Kalinga Stadium in Bhubaneswar." - I would split these up, since the first thought doesn't relate to the second. "the club entered the main competition directly. The competition was hosted at the Kalinga Stadium in Bhubaneswar."
"expressed wanting to pull out of the competition." - reword to "expressed the desire to pull out of the competition."
"Brandon Fernandes gave Goa the lead during the firsthalf before halftime saw a total of six red cards, three of them to Jamshedpur." - reword to "Brandon Fernandes scored the first goal, giving Goa the lead in the first half. The first half saw a total of six red cards, three of them to Jamshedpur."
"were the ones sent off for Jamshedpur." - no need for "the ones"
"Jamshedpur gave up four goals while scoring once at the end." - reword to "Jamshedpur gave up four goals while scoring once in the 91st minute."
"A few days later it was announced that Belfort, Edathodika, and Pal would be given an additional two match ban to what they were already banned for from their red cards." - Why? Clarify what they were already banned for. One game? So three total?
Why don't you include the goals in the game summary box? « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 21:43, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Player statistics
Since the season is over, I don't think you need "As of 12 April 2018" for the tables. These are final statistics that presumably won't be updated.
Please use the {{Abbr}} template to clariy the meaning of each abbreviation in the table header (No, Pos, Apps).
Please use the {{Abbr}} template for the various positions in the table (GK, DF, MF, FW, etc).
Under the appearances column, please explain what the parentheses mean - such as 13 (2)
It would be nice if the big stats table was sortable. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 17:58, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I feel like the image should be used in the infobox, instead of hidden down below.
A bunch of country flag images are used, which are all PD.
Are there any more pictures you can use? Pictures of players, stadiums, etc? For such a big topic, there seems to be limited images. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 15:28, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
References
All references with an url should have the |access-date= field. A significant number of them do not have it.
You use a good number of sources from Twitter (about 11). Per WP:TWITTER, I am not sure these can be counted as reliable sources, since they always include a third person (i.e. that the ownership signed someone else to the team). I may ask about this, because I am not 100% sure.
All of the external links are active (no deadurls).
The Soccerway references should provide the publisher, which is "Perform Group" instead of using the website field (i.e. |publisher=Perform Group instead of |website=Soccerway)
Please review all of the references and include the agency that wrote the article, if applicable. A few, but not all, I noted below:
Ref 53 should have |agency=Press Trust of India
Ref 55 should have |agency=Press Trust of India
Ref 56 should have |agency=Press Trust of India
Ref 58 should have |agency=Scroll Staff
Overall
No copyvio concerns.
Overall a pretty good summary of their season. Just some issues noted above. Will place on hold. Cheers, « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 16:13, 13 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed the Lead as per your suggestions in the GA review.--Hokage666 (talk) 08:22, 23 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks Hokage666. ArsenalFan700, do you plan on addressing these comments soon? This article has been on hold for almost 3 weeks. I am fine keeping it open if there are extenuating circumstances, but if these aren't worked on soon I will have to fail it. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 15:55, 1 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Hey Gozno, really sorry. I was absent for awhile on wikipedia and have been trying to catch up. The Indian Super League literally began 3 days ago and there are games daily now so my time is pre-occupied (not including non-internet stuff like work). I will make an effort to work on it this week... so please can I have one more week. Cheers. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 05:11, 2 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
It's no problem ArsenalFan700, I just want to see that you are starting to work through these comments. You don't need ot finish everything right away. Feel free to take it section by section or however is easiest for you. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 18:16, 2 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
ArsenalFan700, I am going to fail this article. If and when you are ready to address GA comments, please renominate it and ping me. I will gladly work through the review above with you at that time, so you do not have to wait on the GA list for another 6 months. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 15:59, 9 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
