Talk:Ambush (ER)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 03:08, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Almost there. Some copy tweaks and also some suggestions in re: sourcing. Templates like {{pq}} can come in really handy for heavy ProQuest users. 7-day hold to GamerPro64. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:08, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

@GamerPro64 I caught one other issue in fixing all the newspaper clippings. The Steve Hall review was not from the Indianapolis Star but its sister daily, the Indianapolis News. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:36, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

Copy changes

• Hyphenate "most-watched"
  • Done. - GamerPro64 04:47, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• Add a comma after "joins the hospital" (User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences)
  • Done. - GamerPro64 04:47, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• Some of the sentences in the Production section are of very similar length back to back, leading to choppy reading
  • Reworked some parts of the section around. GamerPro64 04:47, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• I'd use "lead to" rather than "lead into"
  • Done. - GamerPro64 04:47, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• the writing, calling the script "hackneyed" and Complete the appositive by adding a comma outside the quotation after "hackneyed"
  • Done. - GamerPro64 04:47, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• Steve Hall for The Indianapolis Star, while finding a few moments to be "undeniably powerful", he felt that the documentary crew plot device cheapened moments such as Dr. Morganstern suffering a heart attack. The "he" is not needed
  • Done. - GamerPro64 04:47, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• October 6th, 1997 Date formatting and an MOS:DATECOMMA; change to "October 6, 1997,"
  • Done. - GamerPro64 04:47, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

Earwig turns up no issues (top number is a content mill mirroring us).

• 5 (OC Register → New York Daily News): "More exciting than daunting" quote is included. Y
• 6 (USA Today): Producers shot a version of the episode Wednesday as a fallback, in case of technical difficulties tonight, but the live show is expected to go smoothly. Y
• 8: Viewership figure in LAT national Nielsen ratings feature is correct. Y
• 15: Gold Derby list ranks the episode 12th. Y
• 17: List of Emmy nominations. Y

Images

This page has no images. I see one tangential one was culled during peer review.

Encouragements

Not required for GA specifications, but good best practices.

• Clip newspapers.com citations and use that as the URL. Some multipage articles require multiple clippings.
• Use ProQuest document IDs. You do this by adding to the |id= parameter of the relevant citation the document number corresponding to each resource, which is in the URL, wrapped in {{ProQuest}} or its shortcut {{pq}}. For instance, the USA Today reference has an ID of 408734998, so you would put {{ProQuest|408734998}}.
  • To make it easier, here are the other two.
    • Orange County Register: 273015476. This is actually a reprint from the New York Daily News the day before.
    • Boston Globe: 403882861

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