Talk:Amelia Bence/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 12:10, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
I'll have this to you soon. She's beautiful! JAGUAR 12:10, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- No caption for the lead image?
- Yes, I didn't know when it was taken or where it was taken and thought it looked nicer without a thumb.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:11, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
- I can find no problems with the lead!
- "That was how she met Paulina Singerman, a neighbor" - sounds a bit unencyclopaedic, like it was extracted from a journal?
- "and Bence won an award as best actress of the year from the City of Buenos Aires" - why is city capitalised?
- "Bence stated in her autobiography, that from that moment she was "black listed" by the regime" - I don't the Argentine military junta has been mentioned previously, so it might be worth mentioning somewhere here
- "which in turn led to cancellations by the Theater of the Chilean Society of Authors for "Pesadilla", "La dama del trébol", "Eran tres"... and "la noche"" - why are there ellipses here?
- "In the film, Bence played a prostitute and La Nación reported that she and Luis Sandrini's performances shone" - 'shone' sounds a bit informal here, how about excelled or something similar?
- The image in the Legacy section might be better off facing the right
References
[edit]- South American Cinema "sources cited" is dead
Close - promoted
[edit]I'm going to stop it right here, as this article has next-to-nothing wrong with it! I was hoping to make this review a bit more comprehensive but I realised that all of the concerns I could find were minor and have little to do with the GA criteria. It is well written, comprehensive and all of the references are looking fine. Well done, this really is among the best articles I've reviewed! 
JAGUAR 13:51, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
Cheers Jaguar, I'm sure SusunW will be delighted!♦ Dr. Blofeld 15:05, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
Yay! That was the longest translation I ever did. ;) Thank you both! I never would have imagined, 2 Latinas in as many months to GA, with mostly Spanish sourcing. SusunW (talk) 15:26, 31 August 2015 (UTC)