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GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 08:08, 27 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Will take this on. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 08:08, 27 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

  • 1
    1.a checkY
    1.b checkY
  • 2
    2.a checkY
    2.b checkY
    2.c checkY
    2.d checkY
  • 3
    3.a checkY
    3.b checkY
  • 4
    4.a checkY
  • 5
    5.a checkY
  • 6
    6.a checkY
    6.b checkY
  • No DAB links checkY
  • No dead links checkY
  • No missing citations checkY
  • Passes spot checks checkY

Discussion

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Prose Suggestions

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Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

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  • Per MOS:LEDELENGTH there should be two to three pararaphs in lede, suggest merging the last two together.
  • by Publius Cornelius Scipio and allied Carthaginian and Numidian armies I think the word allied here actually adds to possible confusion, suggesting the Carthaginian and Numidian armies were at first allied with the Romans; I think removing it might make it more clear for readers.
  • while the Carthaginians were wary of Scipio's skill as a field commander and happy to wait for reinforcements suggest changing "happy to" to "decided to", seems more formal.

Siege of Utica

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Thank you Iazyges, especially for the sorely needed copy edit. My edits in response are [Battle of Utica (203 BC): Difference between revisions - Wikipedia here]. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:56, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]