Talk:Bill Ponsford/GA1

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OK...(rolls up sleeves) let's see what we have here....Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:46, 23 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

A heavy set man, - gah! I never remember and my connection is insanely slow today - does this need a hyphen betwixt the two words?

No hyphen or space, see [[wikt:heavyset] -- Mattinbgn\^talk 03:54, 23 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Critics questioned his ability against fast bowling however and the hostile short-pitched English bowling in the bodyline series of 1932–33 was a contributing factor in his premature retirement from cricket the following year. - I think I'd place the "However" at the beginning. Also, is there any extra meaning with the "premature" over the plainer "early" - I am open-minded.

Changed both, why use a long word when a short word will do. -- Mattinbgn\^talk 03:54, 23 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ponsford would go to some lengths to avoid interaction with the public - "went" (no need for future perfect (?) tense

Agreed. I am not sure what the name of the tense is either. It is a bad habit of mine to change tenses in an article. -- Mattinbgn\^talk 03:54, 23 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think the above issues are trivial enough to not be deal-breakres. I copyedited for flow but overall the article clearly passes GA for referencing, comprehensiveness and layout.

As far as going onto FAC, there is a little reduplication of material but I can't see a way of avoiding that. Could massage the prose a bit more too I guess. Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:26, 23 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much for the review and the copyediting. FAC is the eventual goal but some work on the prose will be required. -- Mattinbgn\^talk 03:54, 23 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]