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GA Review

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Reviewer: Sahara4u (talk · contribs) 12:19, 15 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]


  • Image needs alt text.
  • What MBE stands for?
  • “…..represented England over 150 times…..” in what? Tests, ODIs, T20Is or combined?
  • “…..2005 World Cup resulted in her resuming her career alongside her cricket.” Could you please rephrase this? 3 “her” in the last segment.
  • “…2007 and 2008, and she won the award in 2009.” No need of “she”.
  • “….leading run-scorer in that year's Women's Cricket World Cup”. Which year?

Early life and career

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  • “…was born in Amersham, Buckinghamshire on 25 September 1975.[1] She was born…” 2 consecutive sentences with “was born”.
  • “Although she primarily played hockey as a teenager, in which she represented England at Under-17 and Under-19 as a forward,…” ---> “Although primarily played hockey as a teenager, she represented England at Under-17 and Under-19 as a forward,”
  • “Taylor earnt three Blues for hockey,…” ---> earned?
  • What is a half blue? Explaination needed.
  • “…Thames Valley, and she scored her maiden century in the women's County Championship,…” No need of “she”, and a link to century.
  • Is “Lancashire and Cheshire” one team?

International breakthrough

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  • “Taylor's highest score in the series was 12 runs, and she had batting averages of 11.00 in the ODIs……” ---> No need of “she”
  • “She struck her first century in international cricket, remaining 137 not out against Sri Lanka.” ---> scoring 137 not out?
  • “…fifth wicket in women's One Day Internationals.” ---> ODIs

Full-time cricketer

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  • Image needs alt text.
  • “and Australia won all five of the matches between the sides:…”---> all five matches
  • “….averaged below twenty.” ---> 20.00?

Further development

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  • Image needs alt text.
  • “Further development”--> may be “Further improvement”?
  • “After the World Cup, Taylor was disheartened….”--> which world cup?
  • “….batting averages in the 2006 Super Fours competition in which she scored two centuries and two half-centuries in six matches for the Sapphires.[64]” --> competitions, scoring two centuries and two half-centuries in six matches for the Sapphires.[64]”
  • “….the innings, scoring 9 fours in her 151-ball innings.[69]” --> “hitting 9 fours” since you have already used “scored” in the sentence.
  • “The score was the highest of Taylor's ODI career,[1] and is the joint fourth-highest total in women's ODI cricket.[n 1][70] The score is also….” --> both sentences start with “The score”. Can you make a slight change in the last one.
  • “….best performer with the bat.” You may link the bat.
  • “five appearances in that competition.[74]” ---> those competitions?
  • You are using “Twenty20 matches” throughout the article. Aren’t they Internationals? And also need abbreviation to Twenty20 Internationals.
  • “…., in which Taylor made three scores of 20 or more…”---> Taylor scored 20 or more on three different occasions?

Leading batsman

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  • “After the third match of the series was abandoned without any play…” Why? Can you clarify this?
  • “In a two match ODI series against the West Indies….” A link to West Indies
  • “She struck seven fours during her 70-ball innings, in which she scored 83 runs.”--->may be “She struck seven fours during her 70-ball innings and scored 83 runs.”

Double world champions

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  • Image needs alt text.
  • “In the five match series,…” ---> five-match
  • “…including four fours, before being bowled.” You’ve used “9 fours” earlier in the article, so this should be “4 fours”.
  • “…against Australia in the semi-finals.” semi-final?

References

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  • Ref # 50 is not formatted correctly
  • Ref # 107 needs author
  • You are using slashes in some refs while in others ndashes. I think this needs consistency.

Bibliography

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  • Commons template for Claire Taylor under Bibliography.

Images

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No issues, only need alt text as I mentioned above.

Further comments

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  • You may add her “T20I debut” and “Last T20I” to the infobox.
  • Link Sri Lanka in the lede.
  • Link hockey
  • Link century
  • She struck her first century in international cricket, scoring 137 not out against Sri Lanka.[22] ---> may be Semicolon instead of comma.
  • New Zealand chased down the total in under 36 overs.[75][76] --->. New Zealand chased down the total in fewer than 36 overs.?
  • In the five-match series, which England won 4–0, Taylor remained not out in each of her three innings, scoring 125 runs.[97] ---> Semicolon instead of comma after 4–0.
  • and then an unbeaten 166 runs against a side from Gauteng and North West.[48] --> aside?
  • Captions of the last two images start with “Taylor batting….”. I think these should be “Taylor’s batting….”.
  • No, they are telling the viewed what they can see in the image: in each case, they can see Taylor batting. To use "Taylor's batting.." would presume some sort of comment on her batting itself. Harrias talk 10:14, 19 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • As of August 2012 (in the Notes) ---> As of November 2012.

Zia Khan 06:26, 19 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, good work with the article and I hope the concerns will be addressed ASAP. I'll take another look before passing it to a GA status. Thanks, Zia Khan 15:19, 17 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, as always, for your review. I've responded to each of your points above, and look forward to any further comments. Harrias talk 14:02, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Final assessment

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GA review (see Wikipedia:Good article criteria and WP:GACN)
  1. Well written.
    a (clear and concise prose which doesn't violate copyright laws, grammar and spelling are correct): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, and fiction:
  2. Factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (well-referenced): b (citations to reliable sources): c (Wikipedia:No original research):
  3. Broad in its coverage.
    a (covers major aspects): b (well-focused):
  4. Neutral .
    Fair representation, no bias:
  5. Stable.
    No edit wars nor disputed contents:
  6. Illustrated appropriately by images.
    a b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Conclusion:I don't see any other issues. Good work, keep it up! Zia Khan 12:15, 19 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Pass/Fail: