Talk:Eucalyptus wandoo/GA1
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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 09:26, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
This is an informative and mainly well-cited article, and I've basically got few comments to make.
Small fixes
[edit]I've made some tiny fixes to grammar and punctuation.
"as a part of one of Oldfield's numerous collections in the south western parts of Western Australia." --- this aside makes the sentence it's attached to very long, and it doesn't even seem relevant.
- removed. Hughesdarren (talk) 22:48, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
Amino acid names eg aspartic acid, glutamic acid, proline, arginine should all be in lower case.
- Fixed. Hughesdarren (talk) 22:48, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
Same for rufous treecreeper.
- Fixed. Hughesdarren (talk) 22:48, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
"The pollen immigration of smaller fragmented populations are found to have up to 65% of pollen sourced from other populations that are located at a distance of over 1 km (0.62 mi) apart.[13]" is not clear; suggest you simplify or split the sentence and explain what you mean by "pollen immigration". On third reading, I guess you mean nothing more than that up to 65% of pollination is from remote populations.
- Reworded to "Up to 65% of pollen that is transferred to plants in fragmented populations is sourced from other populations that are located at a distance of over 1 km (0.62 mi) apart." Is that better? Hughesdarren (talk) 02:42, 20 April 2023 (UTC)
- Several portrait-format images require the "|upright" parameter.
- Fixed. Hughesdarren (talk) 02:42, 20 April 2023 (UTC)
Comments
[edit]The main thing I'm missing here is discussion of phylogeny, ideally with a cladogram showing the tree's relatives and ancestry. The second-last paragraph of "Taxonomy" makes some slight gesture in that direction but something more tangible would be desirable.
- I've made a search and can't find anything suitable, so we'll have to wait for some PhD to work on the subject.
On salinity levels, some brief gloss to say whether 50-100 mS/m is high compared to other trees (or ecosystems), i.e. is this a valuable species for salt-infested places, would be useful.
- Added "It is regarded as moderately salt tolerant species when compared to other species of Eucalyptus that are endemic to Western Australia", which was all I could find in the references that relates specifically to wandoo. I will keep looking for a general statement of what is regarded as high salinity levels. Hughesdarren (talk) 03:08, 20 April 2023 (UTC)
- That's sufficient.
References
[edit]Refs [12], [49], [50], and [51] are all the same and should be merged if they are correct: I suspect they are wrongly linked, and that the last three need complete replacement. They are also lacking author and publisher details, and the title is less than helpful also, as the source is actually about "Beefwood Grevillea striata"... which doesn't seem to fit the context. Perhaps you meant to link the last three refs to three different documents.
- Fixed merged to the same reference, there is a page number (46) about wandoo in each of the references now. Cheers. Hughesdarren (talk) 12:28, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
I am not sure that [10] Ken Fern (?) is a reliable source.
- His website has been referenced in other wikipedia articles of Australian plants. Fern has also authored "Plants for a Future: Edible & Useful Plants for a Healthier World" and is one of the founders of the charity "Plants For A Future" Hughesdarren (talk) 12:28, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
- All right, but the {{WP:OTHERSTUFFEXISTS]] argument doesn't contribute!
[31] (iNaturalist) mirrors Wikipedia and cannot be used as a source.
- Not too sure how that was included, removed. Hughesdarren (talk) 12:28, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.