Talk:Hearts and Souls/GA1
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 22:47, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
- Lede: I would change 'season 6' to 'sixth season'; same with 'season 12'
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:01, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
- Background: Same with 'season 2' and 'season 5' and '6'
- Background: "In mid-June 1998, rumors surfaced that Rick Schroder could replace Smits" I would change 'could' to 'would'
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:05, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
- I would move the "Plot" section to be the first main section, then I would make "Background" a sub-header under production and break "Production" up into Writing, Filming, etc.
- Maybe merge "Awards" and "Rating" into a "Rating and accolades" section, since the ratings part is kind of stubby
- Episode: I think you could combine (as in, just delete the line break between them) a few of the paragraphs so that the section doesn't feel so choppy.
- I only saw one stubby paragraph and merged it with the one before it.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:22, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
- References: Ref 8 states that Jimmy Smits was nominated for the award, but it doesn't prove that it was for this episode. Maybe back it up with another citation
- ??? Why would he be nominated for this episode?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:25, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
- I just assumed since it was in this article, it was talking about this episode. I get it now.
- ??? Why would he be nominated for this episode?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:25, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
On than those issues, looks good. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:47, 14 May 2012 (UTC)
- Everything looks good. Passing. Good work!--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:16, 15 May 2012 (UTC)