Talk:Imelda Marcos/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 18:51, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 18:51, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
First, add date and location for infobox image?

Done. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Imeldific (talk • contribs) 06:46, 17 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

She is categorised as being a Visayan, but the article only mentions Spanish descent. Seems something is missing, since she is clearly not only Spanish. Perhaps there could also be a link to Filipino people of Spanish ancestry.
"She briefly dated Benigno Aquino, Jr." When?
" Imee, Ferdinand Jr., aka Bongbong, and Irene, and an adopted girl named Aimee." Could we get birth dates?
There seem to be more images at Commons, none that can be used?[1]
What is her first language? Spanish or some native language?
"she was involved in altercations, including one with The Beatles[18] and another with Dovie Beams" Could these be elaborated?
"an assassination attempt against" What was the motive?
"She also organized the" and "She also initiated". Seems repetitive with two consecutive sentences beginning with "she also".
You need page numbers for books.
"member of the Interim Batasang Pambansa" You could explain what this is.
"US$51-million" Needs spacing, same with "US$60-million" and other places.
"Although she declined buying the Empire State Building because she felt it was "too ostentatious."[50][51]" I don't think you can say "although" there, but not sure.
There is some overlinking of words.
"In 1988, Imelda and Ferdinand Marcos, together with Adnan Khashoggi," What was their relation?
" fortune came from Yamashita's Gold." Briefly explain what this is.
"Monet’s “L’Église et La Seine à Vétheuil” (1881), Alfred Sisley’s “Langland Bay” (1887), and Albert Marquet’s “Le Cyprès de Djenan Sidi Said” (1946)." These names should be written in italics.
"Imelda is a fashion and pop culture icon" Where?
"known as the "Steel Butterfly." Why?
The intro seems a bit short for a article this size, it should summarise the entire article.
That's all for now, you there, Imeldific? FunkMonk (talk) 17:29, 20 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Imeldific (talk • contribs) 13:22, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Fixes look nice, though shouldn't "She has a collection of over a thousand pairs of shoes" be in past tense? FunkMonk (talk) 22:42, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

It's a technicality but okay. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Imeldific (talk • contribs) 01:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Well, she doesn't own them anymore it seems, anyhow, all looks good to me now, so will pass. FunkMonk (talk) 01:13, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]