- You might want to start with the norm and say is a 1931 Indian film, the first sound film made in Tamil and the second sound film to be made in South India.
- "The film was based on the life of the third-century Sanskrit poet Kālidāsa; it " -new sentence please
- Reword the sentence which begins with Although primarily a Tamil film as "Although primarily a Tamil film, due to additional dialogue in Telugu and Hindi it is often considered India's first multilingual film".
- Swadesamitran - in the Tamil newspaper Swadesamitran
- " However, because all of its fifty songs were in Tamil, it is considered a Tamil film only". Contradicts what you said earlier with the dialogue. It can't be considered both can it?
- Is "cowherd" really used in India?
- "In the forest, the minister comes across a foolish cowherd sitting in a tree and cutting down the branch on which he is sitting. The minister persuades the cowherd to come to the palace and has Vidhyadhari marry him. When Vidhyadhari realises she has been cheated and is married to a cowherd, she prays to the goddess Kali for redress." Vague. Why is he foolish and how does she realize that she's been cheated? It would seem she was the fool!
- It was -repetition
- Avoid rhetorical questions in section titles
- "Because Venkatesan's first language was Telugu and could not get his Tamil right, his dialogue was in Telugu. Because the" -repetition of because.
- "The film had compositions" -The film featured compositions
- " Scholars Selvaraj Velayutham and Birgit Meyer believe that the nationalistic songs featured in the film had nothing to do with the main plot. Film News Anandan believes " -repetition of believe
- What is "Film News Anandan"? Is it Film News or Film News critic Anandan or what?
- "Bhaskara Das was the lyricist". Too short and snappy. Merge into "The film featured compositions by the carnatic musician Thyagaraja, with lyrics by Bhaskara Das" further up.
- 30th -against MOS
- "along Wall Tax Road throwing rose petals" -add comma after Road.
Would be best merged into Reception and legacy
- Shouldn't "Kalidas was remade as Kaviratna Kalidas in 1937 and Mahakavi Kalidas in 1955, both of which were critically appreciated and commercially successful. " come after the mention of the only film of 1931 and lost film? Can you mention the directors/actors of each?
- I do not know if they are exactly remakes, I'll rewrite them as other Kalidas based films. Kailash29792 (talk) 07:50, 2 March 2014 (UTC)
- Why is the Deccan and CNN linked but not The Hindu in publishers?
- Why is the first book not linked and the others are?
A little rough still, but given the period of Indian film I think it just about covers the basics. Try to merge a few of the shorter snappy sentences to improve flow.♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:31, 1 March 2014 (UTC)
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- B. MoS compliance:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- Pass or Fail:
Much improved. Would be good if you could find a bit more, but it's fine for GA given the period in Indian film. If you can find the names of the crew an infobox might be worth it, but me enforcing an infobox would look kinda hypocritical LOL.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:55, 2 March 2014 (UTC)