Talk:Kathy Arendsen/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 20:37, 11 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Links

Prose

Lede

Much the same as the other article I reviewed, probably needs combining into say two paragraphs (could be one big one). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Lede needs an expansion, something like "Sports Illustrated as one of the 50 greatest sports figures from Michigan" should be in the lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
former player - former professional player? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
helped pitch Holland Christian High School to the state championship - doesn't make much sense without explaination. something like: "pitched (link) for the Holland Christian High School, where they won the state championship." Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Upon concluding her collegiate career, Arendsen played professional softball with the Raybestos Brakettes for 15 years, earning All-American honors 13 times and winning nine national championships and three world championships. - split into two sentences. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Is there no links for the national or world championship articles? At the very least the world championships will be notable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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softball in three consecutive years. - for three consecutive years. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Link struck out (strikeout). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Perhaps reword that whole sentence, start "In an Exhibition game, during the....". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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winningest coach in program history. - very American terminology. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
This actually needs explaining that she only did this at Oregon. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done

General

I've made a change that would be hard to explain. Hope you don't mind. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
at the urging - weird word choice. Maybe "behest"? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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She originally played first base and the outfield in an adult league only under duress - links for first base and outfield. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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By grade seven - by seventh grade... Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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link basketball.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Repetition of spending one year at Uni. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Link "no-hitters", or explain. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Link strikeout Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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The bit about her gold at the Pan American games should be in the lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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CSUC is used exactly once, perhaps just say "After graduating". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Raybestos Brakettes is linked, but it is mentioned earlier in the article. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Pan Am Games - say the full title, or use an acronym. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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link shutout. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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link "foul-tipping". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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curve, rise, drop and change up - any of these linkable? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Any more info on the world championships? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
one strikeout record tie - tied the record for strikeouts. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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ASA is denoted, but never used. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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338-26 - Endash. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Who are the Ducks? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Link playoff? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Linked to NCAA Division I Softball Tournament

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:37, 11 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Still a few things outstanding HickoryOughtShirt?4, whenever you get chance. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Lee Vilenski, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 16:18, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]