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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Laomaki/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: PrimalMustelid (talk · contribs) 11:42, 13 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start this review within this week. PrimalMustelid (talk) 11:42, 13 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@An anonymous username, not my real name Alright, now that I have time, let's get to the full review, since this article is short:

Full Review

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Order of Sections:

  • For Cenozoic articles, the "Classification" section should actually be named taxonomy, and you can have the "classification" title as the only subsection of it. Also, it should go right after the "Discovery and naming" section. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:51, 17 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
     Partly done but having a section with a single subsection is kind of redundant, so I'd rather just leave it out entirely.

Lead Section:

  • Optional, but it'd be preferred if the beginning of the sentence goes something along the lines of either "is an extinct genus of Paleogene primate belonging to the infraorder Adapiformes" or "is a genus of Paleogene adapiform primate, an extinct group of mammals." PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:51, 17 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    The first few words ("a genus of adapiform primate") are consistent with related genera. The word "Paleogene" doesn't actually appear in the article (although neither does adapiform, to be fair), so it could be mildly confusing to readers.

Classification:

  • No phylogeny cladogram? The cited article "A new primate from the late Eocene of Vietnam illuminates unexpected strepsirrhine diversity and evolution in Southeast Asia" seems to have two different sampling trees that include Laomaki. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:51, 17 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
     Done although for some reason my attempts to change the dimensions of the cladogram gallery so everything would fit better weren't working. Hopefully you know how to fix this.

Description:

  • I know this is an obscure genus, so I can let the short article slide in cases in these. However, I think you can squeeze in a bit more out of the description section, especially when it discusses diagnostic differences. For instance, the P4 and P4 premolars being molariform in shape, differing from other Paleogene-Miocene adapiforms I think is notable. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:51, 17 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
     Done although what the original description actually says isn't quite what you paraphrased here.
  • Try talking a bit more about the diagnostics of the "Sivaladapidae" and why Laomaki is classified as belonging to the family if possible. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:51, 17 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    Unfortunately, the description doesn't really go into to detail about why it's classified as it is.

Paleoecology:

@PrimalMustelid:, I expect you'll still have some feedback before passing this, but I did my best to improve the article per your suggestions. Anonymous 07:14, 19 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

A few more things before promotion:
@An anonymous username, not my real name You want to finish the few minor suggestions now? PrimalMustelid (talk) 01:52, 30 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Oof, my apologies, I've not been very active lately. As far as I'm aware, there does not exist a comprehensive list of every specimen found, and I did already describe the holotype, or at least the material it consisted of. Rodent list has been condensed. Anonymous 04:07, 31 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Great, and promoted. PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:03, 31 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]