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Hi @Pmblair2:

This is such a great start to this article. I've got some feedback for you, mostly concerning tone and other Wikipedia specifics:

  • I removed the citation from the lead you had for her date of birth - usually leads don't contain citations since they're summaries of the body of the article which should contain the same information, except cited
  • For the "Education and Career" section, in the second paragraph, I would remove "Perhaps most notably" due to its sounding like a personal opinion. The sentence (and her achievement) stand well on its own
  • A few references appear to have broken parts to them. I am happy to help you update them if you need any assistance doing that
  • This looks really, really great. I think it's ready to move live once you incorporate these changes! Really excellent work!

Will (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:12, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will (Wiki Ed),

Thanks for the feedback. I'll get the changes made before our meeting today at 4:00. I took the training on moving a page but I wonder if the "move" function is disabled since I'm in this course. If you want to walk us through the steps using this article, that's fine.

saintvip (talk) 10:58, 29 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]