Talk:Parkour/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 01:49, 8 April 2016 (UTC)

I will be picking up the review of this one - both for the Wiki Cup and the GA cup as well. I will be making my review comments over the next couple of days.

Side note, I would love some input on a couple of Featured List candidates, Mexican National Light Heavyweight Championship and NWA World Historic Welterweight Championship. I am not asking for Quid pro Quo, but all help is appreciated.  MPJ-US  01:49, 8 April 2016 (UTC)

• @Gracefool: First round of feedback for the GA review.

• There is a "[citation needed]" tag on the page that needs to be addressed.
• There is a "[who?]" tag on the page that needs to be addressed.

GA Toolbox

I like to get this checked out first, I have found issues using this that has led to quick fails so it's important this passes muster.

Peer review tool

• Headlines should not start with "The" such as "The Yamakasi"
• Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: honor (A) (British: honour), behaviour (B) (American: behavior), favourite (B) (American: favorite), meter (A) (British: metre), defense (A) (British: defence), organize (A) (British: organise), realize (A) (British: realise), ization (A) (British: isation), program (A) (British: programme), programme (B) (American: program ).
• Article has a "[which?]" tag that needs to be addressed.

Copyright violations Tool

• Possible issue - Can you shed any light on if they copied Wikipedia or the other way around?

• http://parkour-dubai.com/philosophies-in-parkour has a 94.3% similarity, large portions of the text is identical per the tool
• this source lists a phrase that's overlapping, please revise the sentence below
• "Academic research on parkour has tended to describe how parkour provides a novel way of interacting with the urban environment that challenges the use and meaning of urban space, metropolitan life, and embodiment."

Disambiguation links

• No problems Y

External links

• The link titled "Generation Yamakasi" is dead
• "Parkour at UGA (practice policy)" is dead
• LInk named "is there any equipment cost..." is dead
• "Youths on roofs" is dead.

Well Written

Lead

• "others, and is" does not need the comma

Entymology

• "obstacle-course" is not hypenated but "obstacle course"

Raymond and David Belle

• "During the First Indochina War his father" needs a comma after War
• "and he was sent to a military" that is two "Ands" in a row, how about "after which he was sent to a military"?
• "endurance, strength and flexibility" needs a comma after strength
• "athletics, but became" does not need a comma

The Yamakasi

• "find physical" should be "find the physical"
• "During this time a conflict" should be "During this time, a conflict"
• "competing interests" competing or perhaps "conflicting interests"?
• "leave the group, and" does not need the comma

Competition

• "sport competition" should be "sports competition"

• "self refinement" should be "self-refinement"
• Typo "practised" should be "practiced"
• "sport-shoes manufacturers" should be "sportshoe manufacturers"
• "adaptation, creativity and freedom" needs a comma after "creatitity"
• "The 'Leave No Trace' project" - just mentioned as a side note, what is this? who is organizing it?
• "When injuries do occur, many members in the parkour community encourage pursuing the most scientifically sound method to recovery and future prevention." that is a really generic statement, can you be more specific?
• "they learnt no special" should be "they learned that no special"
• "Coca-Cola, Nike and Toyota" needs a comma after Nike
• "large scale" should be "large-scale"
• "Indian administered" should be "Indian-administered"
• "Through visual media, news sites like these have made global the community efforts of traceurs in the Middle East and Southeast Asia." generic sounding, can you be more specfic?
• "six episode" should be "six-episode"
• "with hopes to teach" should be "with hopes of teaching"
• " and some members of the United States Marine Corps have tried parkour." considering how many Marines there are and what they do this really does not say much of anything at all.

Sources/verifiable

• There are references in the lead - there really shouldn't be any references unless the lead covers something not also mentioned in the article. 
• No reference for the first Parkour Jam?
• Refernce 6 - very little detail on the source - who did the interview? for what media etc.?
• Reference 7 - title is formatted incorrectly and has text in danish?
• Reference 17 - missing basic information such as publisher, accessdate etc.
• Reference 20 - missing basic information
• Reference 50 - listed as "Cine Parkour" but same reference is listed as "Angel" elsewhere, consistency please.
• Reference 61 - missing basic information
• Reference 62 - missing basic information
• Reference 63 - missing basic information
• Reference 66 - missing basic information
• Reference 62 - missing basic information
• Reference 72 - missing basic information
• Reference 86 - missing basic information
• Reference 87 - missing basic information
• Reference 88 - missing basic information, showing the url

Broad in coverage

• Yes

Neutral

• Not finding anything obviously wrong here.

Stable

• Hmmm I do see some discussions on if Freerunning is actually a seperate entity deserving of it's own article - I agree I don;'t see anything in Freerunning that indicates it's NOT Parkour. Looking at the last year or so that discussion does seem to have died down, not sure if it is because someone gave up or a consenus was reached.

Illustrated / Images

• No issues found Y

General

• @Gracefool: - I have completed my review and I will put the article on hold for at least 7 days to allow for improvements to be made, more time can be given if I see that you're in the middle of making updates.  MPJ-US  02:25, 11 April 2016 (UTC)

• @Gracefool: - Review has been on hold for six days, I need to see improvement activity by tomorrow to be able to justify keeping the review open.  MPJ-US  12:42, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for this, really nice work. Luckily I logged in today! I've started fixing the problems.

I've finished the spelling and well written issues. Though with the latter, that was make-work - it would've been faster to just fix the purely grammatical issues yourself and I could have just as effectively learnt from the mistakes (not that I wrote most of them in the first place)... I disagree with one: I think it's better to keep the comma in "chose to leave the group, and used the name".

Re stable, would that really be an issue? The worst case would be merging Freerunning back, which would have minimal impact on this article as it contains most of the content already.

··gracefool 💬 02:22, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

• I disagree that you would have learned from me fixing it just as effectively, I do IT training for a living, people learn less from watching me do fix an issue than having them fix it while I supervise. As for Freerunning I mainly brought it up because that seems to be the main content dispute on the article, but like I stated it looks like it has not been an issue for a year or so. Not sure if anything really can be addressed right now, just something to watch for.  MPJ-US  09:54, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

• I have no problems with THIS article if free running remains separate, it can still be a GA. @Gracefool: do you believe you have addressed everything else??  MPJ-US  21:03, 20 April 2016 (UTC)

• @Gracefool: - I see stuff still unaddressed, it has been quite a while, which is partly my fault for being really busy IRL, but I am going to fail it. Feel free to address the issues and apply again.  MPJ-US  12:35, 30 April 2016 (UTC)